Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors (e.g., "mess mess", "first my first priority"). Use correct verb forms and articles: "I don't like mess in my room" → better: "I don't like having a messy room."

例: I do like to keep things tidy. For example, I make my bed and put clothes away every morning because a neat room helps me feel calm and focused.

提案: Answer directly about past habits using correct past tense and give one specific example. Avoid listing objects without context and correct redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "When I was a child, I used to...").

例: When I was a child, I used to tidy my room every weekend. For instance, I would vacuum the floor and put my toys back in boxes so my parents wouldn't get annoyed.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence describing what you do, then add a specific method and a result using a linking word. Use complete grammatical structures instead of fragments.

例: I keep my study space tidy by clearing my desk after each study session and organizing papers in folders. As a result, I feel more comfortable and can concentrate better.

提案: Give a direct opinion followed by a reason and a brief example. Expand beyond a one-word answer to show fluency and use linking words like "because" or "so".

例: Yes, I think it is necessary to be tidy because it reduces stress and saves time when looking for things. For example, I can always find my notes quickly when they are well organized.

× Yes, I like to keep things tidy because I don't like mess mess in my room.

✓ Yes, I like to keep things tidy because I don't like mess in my room.

The repetition 'mess mess' is incorrect; it should be a single noun 'mess'. This is an adjective/noun misuse and redundancy. Remove the duplicate to make the sentence natural.

× So I first my first priority is I clean up my all things and my room.

✓ So my first priority is to clean up all my things and my room.

The original has word order and redundancy problems. Correct structure uses 'my first priority is to + verb' and the determiner 'all my things' rather than 'my all things'. Reordering improves clarity and grammaticality.

× I use a mop and a cleaner and vacuum cleaner to clean my room and tidy to clean my room.

✓ I used a mop, a cleaner and a vacuum cleaner to clean and tidy my room when I was a child.

The question asked about past habit as a child, so past tense 'used' is appropriate. Original repeats phrases and omits articles ('a vacuum cleaner'). Combine verbs 'clean and tidy' to avoid repetition and add time reference 'when I was a child' for clarity.

× Tidy as a child.

✓ I kept my room tidy as a child.

This fragment lacks a verb and subject. Complete the sentence with subject 'I' and past tense verb 'kept' to form a full, grammatical sentence that answers the question.

× Ah, my basically tidy space feels very comfortable and study is very easy.

✓ Basically, a tidy space feels very comfortable and studying is much easier.

'My basically tidy space' is awkward; 'basically' should modify the clause, not 'my'. Use 'a tidy space' or 'my tidy space'. Also 'study is very easy' should use the gerund 'studying' to mean the activity, and 'much easier' is more natural. Adjust word order and form for correctness.

× Yes.

✓ Yes, I think it is necessary to be tidy.

A one-word response is grammatically acceptable in conversation but does not fully answer the question. To provide a complete sentence, add a subject and verb: 'I think it is necessary to be tidy.' This clarifies the opinion and uses 'it is' correctly.