Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện: Trả lời cần ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No và lý do chính). Tránh lặp từ và sửa ngữ pháp (ví dụ: "keep things tidy" -> "keeping things tidy"). Thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể bằng cách dùng liên từ như "because" hoặc "so" để làm rõ lý do. Chẳng hạn sử dụng thì đúng (present simple) và cấu trúc câu tự nhiên hơn.

例: Yes, I do. I like keeping things tidy because a clean space helps me feel refreshed and less stressed. For example, when my desk is organized I can focus better and finish tasks faster.

提案: Cải thiện: Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes/No) và dùng thì quá khứ phù hợp. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "I'm do not"; sửa thành "I don't" hoặc "I wasn't". Rút gọn và cụ thể hoá lý do, nêu ví dụ cụ thể về hoạt động bạn thích làm thay vì dọn dẹp. Dùng liên từ như "because" hoặc "so" để kết nối ý.

例: No, I wasn't very tidy as a child. I often preferred playing video games or reading books instead of cleaning, so I usually left my toys and clothes on the floor.

提案: Cải thiện: Trả lời cần cụ thể hơn và cấu trúc rõ ràng: nêu phương pháp chính rồi bổ sung chi tiết bằng liên từ (for example, then, so). Sửa ngữ pháp và dùng từ phù hợp ("measure" -> "measures", "bring to many" unclear). Nêu 2–3 bước cụ thể bạn làm hàng ngày để giữ gọn gàng.

例: I use a few simple measures. Firstly, I keep only the materials I need on my desk and put everything else in drawers. For example, after finishing a task I immediately file the papers and return pens to a pen holder.

提案: Cải thiện: Trả lời cần rõ ràng và chính xác về ý tưởng. Sử dụng ngữ pháp đúng (ví dụ: "tidy" -> noun/adjective contexts), tránh từ sai như "measure" ở đây. Trình bày một lý do chính và một ví dụ cụ thể về lợi ích của việc gọn gàng (ví dụ: ấn tượng với người khác, làm việc hiệu quả hơn). Dùng liên từ như "because" hoặc "so" để mạch lạc.

例: Yes, I think being tidy is important because it reflects good habits and helps you work more efficiently. For instance, a tidy desk makes it easier to find documents and gives a better impression during meetings.

× Definitely keep things tidy is the way for people to feel more fresh and have some room to breathe in their mind because keep them tidy not only make for the their arrangement or arrangement skills or some kind of tidy skills but also can give them some fresh atmosphere.

✓ Definitely, keeping things tidy is a way for people to feel fresher and have some mental space because keeping things tidy not only improves their ability to organize but also gives them a fresher atmosphere.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure problems: missing gerund after 'Definitely' and after verbs, incorrect verb forms ('keep' should be 'keeping'), subject-verb agreement ('make' should be 'improves' or 'helps'), unnecessary words ('the their'), and awkward phrasing. Suggestion: use gerunds after expressions like 'is a way of' (keeping), ensure verbs agree with subjects, remove redundant articles, and simplify phrases (e.g., 'arrangement skills' -> 'ability to organize').

× I'm not really remember but to be honest I'm do not a person who keep my room tidy as a child because it is take many times for me to keep the room tidy up while I can give that time for my leisure activities or some of the my hobbies that I want more.

✓ I don't really remember, but to be honest I was not a person who kept my room tidy as a child because it took a lot of time for me to tidy the room, and I preferred to spend that time on leisure activities or hobbies.

Errors: incorrect tense and auxiliary usage ('I'm not really remember' should be 'I don't really remember'), incorrect negation order ('I'm do not a person' should be 'I was not a person'), wrong verb forms for past ('keep' -> 'kept'; 'is take' -> 'took'), and article/pronoun errors ('some of the my hobbies' -> 'hobbies'). Suggestion: use simple past to describe childhood habits, use correct negation and past verb forms, and simplify the phrase about hobbies.

× For these aspects I have many measure for keeping my work or study space tidy.

✓ For these aspects I have many measures for keeping my work or study space tidy.

The noun 'measure' needs to be plural ('measures') to match 'many'. Suggestion: ensure noun plurality matches quantifiers like 'many'.

× The first thing I always bring to many like task or assignments.

✓ The first thing I always bring is many materials for tasks or assignments.

Original lacks a clear verb and object and misuses 'bring to many'. Suggest using 'bring' with a clear direct object ('materials') and parallel nouns ('tasks or assignments').

× Yeah, materials for work or otherwise I bring it and when I use it I will take it back.

✓ I bring materials for work, and when I use them I put them back.

Problems: pronoun agreement ('it' should be 'them' for plural 'materials'), inconsistent tense ('will' unnecessary), and awkward 'take it back' for returning items. Suggest using present simple for habitual actions and matching pronouns to plural nouns.

× Yes definitely tidy is not only the personal character but it also a skill for person to tidy up and also bring their mind.

✓ Yes, definitely being tidy is not only a personal trait but also a skill for a person to tidy up and clear their mind.

Errors: 'tidy' should be noun/gerund 'being tidy' or adjective 'tidy habits'; 'personal character' is unnatural -> 'personal trait'; 'bring their mind' is incorrect -> 'clear their mind'. Suggest using idiomatic collocations: 'clear their mind', 'personal trait'.

× If you can measure and have your room tidy, the person like look and will elevate evaluate you as the person who have a tidy mind.

✓ If you can maintain and keep your room tidy, people will view and evaluate you as a person who has a tidy mind.

Issues: verbs and subjects disagree ('person like look' unclear), wrong verb forms ('have' -> 'has'), awkward verbs ('elevate evaluate'). Suggest: use 'people will view/evaluate you' and ensure third-person singular agreement ('has').