Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ получается понятным, но содержит разговорные слова и повторения (kinda, like), грамматические ошибки и длинное связное предложение. Постарайтесь давать более краткий топик-сентенс, избегать говорящих «заполнителей» (uh, like, kinda), улучшить грамматику (например: I can't stand it; I try to clean my whole house), и добавить одно связанное пояснение с логической связкой.

例: Yes, I do. I feel anxious when my belongings are messy, so I clean regularly to avoid clutter. For example, I tidy my room every evening which helps me relax the next day.

提案: Ответ содержит запинки, повторения и ошибки в временах/структуре (even I've not cleaned). Старайтесь давать простое прямое предложение в начале (No, I didn't), затем одно-два кратких пояснения с логическими связками и конкретным примером (parents punished me; now I clean regularly). Избегайте лишних самоисправлений и разговорных «uh».

例: No, I didn't. My parents made me clean my room as a child and sometimes punished me if I did not, so now tidying is a habit I cannot ignore.

提案: Ответ неясен из-за словоупотребления и ошибок (put timer, briefly keep briefly clean, pale up, tiny person). Нужно дать чёткую структуру: топик-сентенс с действием (I use a timer to tidy), затем пояснение с логическим словом (because/so) и конкретный пример (every 30 minutes I clear the desk). Используйте правильные фразы: set a timer, clear my desk, let things pile up.

例: I set a 15-minute timer and quickly clear my desk each evening because this short routine prevents clutter. For instance, I put away papers and wipe the surface before I finish working.

提案: Ответ содержит повторы и неверную структуру (a lot of people be The main reason is). Улучшите связность: начните с прямого мнения, затем используйте связочные слова (because, therefore) и приведите конкретные причины или пример. Избегайте разговорных вставок и неформальных оборотов.

例: Yes, I think it is important. Being tidy helps reduce stress because a clean environment makes it easier to concentrate and improves your mood, so many people feel calmer in an orderly space.

× Well actually yes because when my things are kinda chaotic I can't stand, I feel overwhelmed.

✓ Well, actually yes, because when my things are kind of chaotic I can't stand it; I feel overwhelmed.

The sentence omits the dummy object 'it' after 'can't stand'. Use 'it' to refer to the situation. Also 'kinda' is informal; use 'kind of'. Add commas for clarity and a semicolon to join related clauses. Suggestion: Include the pronoun 'it' after 'can't stand', avoid informal 'kinda' in formal contexts, and punctuate to show clause boundaries.

× That's why I try to like clean all my house and kinda it's my second nature because I can't let my things pile up.

✓ That's why I try to clean my whole house, and it's kind of my second nature because I can't let my things pile up.

Remove filler 'like' which is colloquial and ungrammatical here. Use 'clean my whole house' rather than 'clean all my house'. 'Kinda' should be 'kind of'. Correct word order: 'and it's kind of my second nature'. Suggestion: Omit unnecessary filler words, use 'whole' for the entirety of a singular noun, and use 'kind of' in formal writing.

× Honestly, no, but my parents forced me to clean my house, my own home, my own room.

✓ Honestly, no, but my parents forced me to clean my house, my home, and my room.

The sentence uses past tense 'forced' correctly; the problem is redundant phrasing. Combine items with commas and use 'and' for the final item to make it grammatical and natural. Suggestion: Remove repetition and use proper list punctuation.

× I mean, uh, sorry and it was a bit weird for me, but I tried with my best because even I've not uh, cleaned my room.

✓ I mean, sorry — it was a bit weird for me, but I tried my best because I hadn't cleaned my room before.

Use past perfect 'hadn't cleaned' to indicate an action prior to another past action. 'Tried with my best' is ungrammatical; use 'tried my best'. Remove filler 'uh' for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'tried my best' and past perfect 'hadn't' when referring to an earlier action.

× They punished me.

✓ They punished me.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change necessary. Suggestion: Sentence is fine; ensure it fits context.

× That's why now it's my second nature.

✓ That's why now it's my second nature.

Sentence is correct; 'it's my second nature' is appropriate. No grammatical correction needed. Suggestion: Keep as is.

× Well, I put timer and briefly keep briefly clean my umm space and it really helped me because it was kinda interesting challenge.

✓ Well, I set a timer and briefly clean my space, and it really helped me because it was kind of an interesting challenge.

Use 'set a timer' instead of 'put timer'. Remove duplicate 'briefly'. Use 'clean my space' (present tense habitual), and add the article 'an' before 'interesting challenge'. 'Kinda' → 'kind of'. Suggestion: Use correct collocations ('set a timer'), avoid word duplication, and include articles where needed.

× But honestly I can't let my things pale up.

✓ But honestly I can't let my things pile up.

Typo 'pale' should be 'pile'. Ensure verb 'pile up' used with plural 'things' is correct. Suggestion: Correct spelling to 'pile' and keep plural noun 'things'.

× That's why I can say I'm kinda tiny person.

✓ That's why I can say I'm kind of a tidy person.

The intended adjective is 'tidy', not 'tiny'. Use 'kind of' instead of 'kinda' in formal correction and include the article 'a' before 'tidy person'. Suggestion: Use accurate adjective 'tidy', include the article 'a', and avoid informal 'kinda'.

× To some extent, yes. Being tidy is kinda necessary for a lot of people.

✓ To some extent, yes. Being tidy is kind of necessary for many people.

Replace informal 'kinda' with 'kind of' and use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' in formal speech. Modal verbs are fine here but wording improved. Suggestion: Prefer 'many people' and 'kind of' in more formal contexts.

× Uh, a lot of people be The main reason is you feel yourself like tidy room, tidy mind you feel yourself not overwhelmed, you will be in a good mood.

✓ The main reason is that you feel that with a tidy room you have a tidy mind; you don't feel overwhelmed and you will be in a good mood.

Original has incorrect verb 'be' and disordered clauses. Use 'The main reason is that...' to introduce explanation. Replace 'you feel yourself like tidy room' with 'with a tidy room you have a tidy mind' and correct sequence of ideas. Use conjunctions and punctuation to join clauses properly. Suggestion: Use 'The main reason is that' + clear clause structure, avoid 'be' as a standalone verb here, and express thoughts with parallel structure.