Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition (e.g., "never ever like"), and add one brief specific detail or example using a linking word to enrich the response. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I do — I prefer a tidy room because it helps me relax. For example, I put clothes in the wardrobe and sort my desk every evening so everything is easy to find.

提案: Provide a clearer, grammatically correct response with a smooth structure: topic sentence + supporting detail. Avoid filler words ("umm") and broken sentences. Use a linking word to show contrast if needed and give a brief example of how your parents helped.

例: No, I didn’t — I was quite messy as a child. However, my parents taught me to tidy up by asking me to make my bed and put toys away every night, which gradually changed my habits.

提案: Be careful with word order and collocations ("everyday" vs "every day"). Combine similar actions into one coherent sentence and use a linking word to show sequence or routine. Give one specific habit or result to make it more concrete.

例: I keep my study space tidy by arranging my books on the shelf every day and wiping the desk regularly. As a result, I can focus better because everything is organized and easy to reach.

提案: Make your answer more fluent and concise. State your opinion clearly, then give one reason with a specific example. Remove fillers ("uh") and avoid vague phrases like "vibe" repeatedly—use clearer nouns (e.g., "atmosphere" or "mood").

例: Yes, I think being tidy is important because it improves the atmosphere and reduces stress. For instance, when my room is organized I can study more calmly and finish tasks faster.

× I never ever like to be messy with my room.

✓ I never like my room to be messy.

The phrase 'never ever like to be messy with my room' has awkward word order and redundant 'ever'. Use 'never' alone and place 'my room' as the subject of 'to be messy' for clarity: 'I never like my room to be messy.' Also avoid 'with' in this context.

× No, when I was a child I used to mess up the things in my room.

✓ No, when I was a child I used to mess up the things in my room.

This sentence is acceptable for past habitual action with 'used to'. No grammatical correction required; it correctly expresses a past habit.

× My parents would always. Umm teach me out to clean my room everyday.

✓ My parents would always, um, teach me how to clean my room every day.

The original has a fragment 'My parents would always.' and incorrect 'teach me out to'. Combine into one sentence, remove unnecessary pause markers or integrate them with commas, and use 'teach me how to' for the correct verb pattern. 'Every day' should be two words.

× I keep my study space tidy by everyday arranging my books in an orderly manner.

✓ I keep my study space tidy by arranging my books in an orderly manner every day.

Adverb 'every day' should follow the verb phrase rather than interrupting it; 'by arranging' is the correct gerund phrase after 'by'. This makes the sentence natural and grammatically correct.

× Moreover, I clean my desk and keep my chair and desk in a proper place.

✓ Moreover, I clean my desk and keep my chair and desk in their proper places.

Use plural 'places' because two items (chair and desk) have separate locations, and 'their' refers back to the plural subject. 'Proper place' is acceptable but 'their proper places' is clearer.

× Yes, it is really very necessary that the things should be clean and tidy, which uh clearly impacts on the vibe of the place.

✓ Yes, it is really necessary that things be clean and tidy, which clearly impacts the vibe of the place.

Reduce redundancy ('really very' -> 'really' or 'very'); 'that things should be' is wordy—use subjunctive 'that things be' or 'that things should be' both acceptable; remove 'on' after 'impacts' (impact takes direct object). Remove filler 'uh' and avoid 'the things' in favor of 'things'.

× A clean and tidy place uh offers a positive vibe, whereas uh negative vibes are immersed out from a.

✓ A clean and tidy place offers a positive vibe, whereas a messy place gives off negative vibes.

Original has fillers and incorrect phrasing 'are immersed out from a' which is ungrammatical. Replace with natural contrast: 'a messy place gives off negative vibes.' Remove filler 'uh' and ensure parallel structure.