Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear, natural and directly addresses the question. To improve further, shorten slightly to avoid redundancy and add a concise example or brief reason using a linking phrase (e.g., “for example” or “because”) to show coherence. Also vary vocabulary slightly (e.g., use “environment” or “workspace”).

例: Yes, I prefer to keep things tidy because a clean environment helps me concentrate. For example, when my desk is clear I can focus on writing without searching for materials.

提案: Good structure: direct answer plus contrast and reason. Improve accuracy and grammar (past habits should use past tense consistently). Replace vague phrases with specific examples and limit to 3–4 sentences. Use linking words like “but” or “however” correctly.

例: No, I wasn’t tidy as a child; my toys and clothes were often scattered on the floor. However, as I grew older I noticed that a neat room helped me study more effectively, so now I always tidy my desk and put toys or clothes away after using them.

提案: Strong, specific details and examples—good answer length. To refine, use precise linking words (e.g., “first,” “then,” “also”) and avoid overlong lists; group related actions and mention frequency succinctly. Swap “besides” with “also” or “in addition.”

例: I tidy up right after studying: first I put away my pens and books, then I wipe the desk. I also sweep the floor daily and change my bedsheets weekly, which helps me feel calm and focused.

提案: Good balanced opinion and recognition of different preferences. Improve grammatical accuracy (subject-verb agreement) and make the reasoning more specific by giving an example or prediction. Use a linking phrase like “however” or “on the other hand” to show contrast.

例: I think being tidy is helpful but not strictly necessary; for example, some people find a bit of clutter sparks creativity. However, for tasks requiring concentration, a tidy workspace is usually more effective.

× No I didn't, I was a messy kid and my toys and clothes are always scattered on the floor.

✓ No, I wasn't; I was a messy kid and my toys and clothes were always scattered on the floor.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses. The speaker refers to childhood (past), so use past tense consistently: 'I wasn't' instead of 'I didn't' for 'I used to be messy', and 'were always scattered' instead of 'are always scattered'. Also add a comma after 'No' and use a semicolon or conjunction to join clauses for clarity.

× However, since I grew up, I realized that tidy up can help me focus on my studies better.

✓ However, since I grew up, I realized that tidying up can help me focus on my studies better.

After verbs like 'realized that', a noun or gerund is needed to refer to the action. 'Tidying up' is the gerund form functioning as a noun. 'Tidy up' is the base verb or phrasal verb and is incorrect here.

× So now I keep my space neat to improve my study efficiency.

✓ So now I keep my space neat to improve my studying efficiency.

This is a minor style issue: 'study efficiency' is awkward; using the gerund 'studying' makes the phrase more natural in English. Tense is present and appropriate.

× Actually, I do a quick clean up after I finish my studies.

✓ Actually, I do a quick clean-up after I finish my studies.

This is primarily a noun/compound word issue: 'clean-up' as a noun should be hyphenated. The tense and participle are acceptable; hyphenation improves correctness.

× For example, I will put away my pens and books after I use them.

✓ For example, I put away my pens and books after I use them.

Using 'will' here is not wrong but sounds like habitual action and is better expressed with the simple present 'I put away' when describing regular habits. Keep tense consistent with 'after I use them'.

× Besides, I sweep and mop the floor every day and change my bed sheets every week.

✓ Besides, I sweep and mop the floor every day and change my bedsheets every week.

'Bed sheets' is commonly written as one word 'bedsheets' or as 'bed sheets'; both are acceptable. This sentence is otherwise correct in present tense describing habits.

× Well I think being tidy is helpful but not necessary because someone actually works better in a messy room.

✓ Well, I think being tidy is helpful but not necessary because some people actually work better in a messy room.

'Someone' is singular and vague; 'some people' correctly matches the plural idea 'work better'. Also add a comma after 'Well' for clarity and flow.

× Everyone just have their own way to stay productive.

✓ Everyone just has their own way to stay productive.

'Everyone' is grammatically singular and requires the singular verb 'has'. Using 'their' as a singular gender-neutral pronoun is acceptable in modern English.