Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more natural and concise, correct grammar, and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. For example, replace awkward tense and phrasing and remove repeated ideas.

例: Yes, I do. I keep my desk tidy because it makes it easy to find my stationery and notebooks, so I don’t waste time searching for things. For instance, I always store pens in a cup and stack notebooks by subject, which speeds up my study sessions.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure, include a clear topic sentence and a specific supporting detail with a linking word. Use past tense correctly and be concise—avoid unnecessary repetition.

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I cleaned my room regularly and put pencils in a pencil case and books on shelves, so my mother often praised me. Because of that, I learned good habits early on.

提案: Combine the two short sentences into one coherent response, correct grammar, and add a specific routine with linking words to make the answer more detailed and natural.

例: I always put items back in their original place after using them, so I can find them easily later. For example, I return pens to a desk cup and keep frequently used books on the top shelf to save time.

提案: Clarify the reason and correct the unfinished fragment. Provide a concise topic sentence followed by a clear, specific reason and an example or result using a linking word. Avoid unclear words like 'Come.'

例: Yes, I think being tidy is necessary because it helps me concentrate and reduces stress. For example, when my desk is organized I can focus on studying without distractions, so I work more efficiently.

× Yes, I prefer to keep my desk tidy because it helps me find my stationery and notebook so I couldn't waste my time in finding.

✓ Yes, I prefer to keep my desk tidy because it helps me find my stationery and notebook so I don't waste time looking for them.

The original uses 'couldn't waste my time in finding' which is ungrammatical and mixes tense/modal ideas. This fits the 'Verb + -ing form' category because 'in finding' is an incorrect gerund phrase here. Use simple present 'don't waste' to match habitual preference and 'looking for' as the correct -ing form; also make nouns plural and concise ('them'). Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual actions and 'look for/looking for' instead of 'in finding'.

× Yes, when I was child I always cleaned my room and arranged my pencil into pencil case and books to shelves, so my mother always complimented me.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I always cleaned my room and arranged my pencils into a pencil case and my books on the shelves, so my mother always complimented me.

The sentence has several number errors: 'child' needs the article 'a child'; 'pencil' should be plural 'pencils'; 'pencil case' needs an article; 'books to shelves' requires 'on the shelves'. These are singular/plural and article errors. Fixing plurality and adding appropriate articles makes the sentence grammatical and natural. Suggestion: Use plural for countable items when referring to more than one, and include articles ('a', 'the') where needed.

× After I finish using the items, I always put them back in original place. It is helps me find easily later.

✓ After I finish using the items, I always put them back in their original place. It helps me find them easily later.

The phrase 'in original place' is missing a determiner; 'their original place' is correct. Also 'It is helps' incorrectly combines auxiliary 'is' with 'helps'—this is a sentence structure error but primarily fixed by removing 'is'. The pronoun 'them' clarifies what 'find' refers to. The main issue aligns with incorrect use of the definite article/determiner. Suggestion: Use possessive determiner 'their' for items and avoid extra auxiliaries; place adverb 'easily' before time expression 'later' for natural order.

× Yes, I think being tidy is necessary in life because it makes me concentrate on my desk and. Come.

✓ Yes, I think being tidy is necessary in life because it helps me concentrate on my work at my desk.

The original ends with 'and. Come.' which is fragmented and unclear. This fits present tense and sentence structure issues: use present simple 'helps' for general truth, and express purpose/result 'concentrate on my work at my desk'. Remove extraneous words. Suggestion: Keep present simple for general statements and ensure sentences are complete and coherent.