Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Pronunciation and some word choice errors ("kill my house") reduce clarity. Keep answers natural and concise (max 5 sentences). Use a clear topic sentence then 1–2 supporting details with linking words. Replace wrong verbs and avoid redundancy ("neat and well organized" is fine but pick one).

例: Yes, I like to keep my home tidy because I can't stand clutter, especially since my daughter was born. For example, I tidy up every evening by doing the laundry and putting her toys away so the house feels relaxed and welcoming.

提案: Good direct answer and clear supporting details. Improve coherence by linking sentences and avoiding short choppy sentences. Use simple past consistently and combine ideas into 2–3 sentences for a more natural flow.

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I always kept my room tidy because I shared it with my sister, so I swept, made the beds and put toys away every day to keep the space comfortable for both of us.

提案: Grammatical mistakes and incomplete sentences harm clarity ("a paperwork," "filing cabinets," "send me time," unfinished last sentence). Organize answer: topic sentence + concise supporting details with linking words. Use correct noun/verb forms and finish thoughts.

例: I keep my workspace tidy by sorting paperwork into labeled filing cabinets for categories like bills, reference materials and work notes. This system saves me time when I need a document and prevents papers from piling up.

提案: Strong content with a clear reason and example, but small grammar issues ("Is I think," "increase" should be "increases"). Keep it concise and use linking words like "because" and "for example" correctly. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I think it's important to keep things tidy, especially with young children, because a messy environment increases the risk of germs and illness. For example, toys and surfaces that are not cleaned regularly can spread infections.

× Yes, I like to kill my house neat and well organized because I can't stand clutter, especially since my daughter was born.

✓ Yes, I like to keep my house neat and well organized because I can't stand clutter, especially since my daughter was born.

The student used 'kill' which is incorrect and likely a typo for 'keep'. This is a word choice error that makes the sentence meaningless. Replace with the correct verb 'keep' to convey maintaining tidiness. Also ensure parallel structure 'neat and well organized' is acceptable.

× I tend to tidy up every evening, doing the laundry and putting her toys away so the home feels relaxed and welcoming for the whole family.

✓ I tend to tidy up every evening, doing the laundry and putting her toys away so the home feels relaxed and welcoming for the whole family.

No grammatical change needed; sentence is correct. Provide no correction. (Included to show checked and acceptable.)

× I was sweeping, making the beds and putting toys away so the space stayed organized and comfortable for both of us.

✓ I swept, made the beds and put toys away so the space stayed organized and comfortable for both of us.

The original used past continuous 'I was sweeping' alongside simple past 'stayed', which is awkward here because the student describes habitual past actions. Use simple past verbs 'swept, made, put' to indicate repeated actions when younger. This fits the question about childhood habits.

× I usually keep my workspace tidy by sorting a paperwork into a labeled filing cabinets organized by categories such as bills, uh, reference materials, and work notes.

✓ I usually keep my workspace tidy by sorting paperwork into labeled filing cabinets organized by categories such as bills, reference materials, and work notes.

Errors: 'a paperwork' is incorrect because 'paperwork' is uncountable and needs no article; 'a labeled filing cabinets' mixes singular article with plural noun. Remove 'a' and make 'filing cabinets' plural or change to 'a labeled filing cabinet'. Also remove filler 'uh'.

× This system send me time and when I need a document and prevents papers from.

✓ This system saves me time when I need a document and prevents papers from getting lost.

Several issues: 'send me time' is incorrect verb choice and form — use 'saves me time'; an extra 'and' makes the sentence fragment; 'prevents papers from' is incomplete and needs a gerund phrase like 'getting lost' or 'becoming misplaced'. Correcting restores clear meaning and proper subject-verb agreement ('system saves').

× Is I think it's important to keep things tidy, especially in a family with young children, because living in a messy environment increase the risk of germs and illness.

✓ I think it's important to keep things tidy, especially in a family with young children, because living in a messy environment increases the risk of germs and illness.

Errors: leading 'Is' is incorrect and should be removed; subject-verb agreement error 'environment increase' should be 'environment increases' because singular subject 'environment' requires singular verb. Fixing these yields a grammatically correct present-tense statement.

× For example, toys and surfaces that are not cleaned regularly can spread infections.

✓ For example, toys and surfaces that are not cleaned regularly can spread infections.

Sentence is correct as written; 'are not cleaned regularly' is proper passive present tense and matches context. No correction necessary.