Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one brief reason and one specific example. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, "because" or "so"). Also correct small grammar issues ("my rooms" → "my room" if you mean one room).

例: Yes, I do. I like to keep my room tidy because it helps me find things quickly and reduces stress. For example, I always return books to the shelf after studying so I don’t waste time searching later.

提案: Answer directly, then give a specific childhood example and avoid repeating the same reason. Use a past-time expression and linkers (e.g., "when I was younger"). Fix modal tense: use "made" rather than "could make" for past.

例: Yes, I did. When I was younger my parents made me tidy my room every evening; this routine made me feel calmer and taught me how to organize my things.

提案: Good structure and specific details. To improve, add a linking phrase and one short example of a habit or tool you use (e.g., labels, boxes). Also avoid repeating similar words (neat/tidy).

例: I usually organize my books on the shelf and sort my notes into labeled folders, so everything is easy to find. For instance, I use a box for loose pens and a weekly planner on my desk to keep tasks visible.

提案: Give a clear opinion, then support it with one specific reason and a brief example or prediction. Avoid repeating earlier points verbatim (about parents). Use linking words like "because" and "for example" and vary vocabulary (organized → orderly).

例: Yes, I do. Being orderly reduces stress and saves time because you can find things quickly; for example, when my desk is clear I can start studying immediately instead of searching for materials.

× When I was a child my parents told me that being organized is very important, so I keep my rooms tidy every day.

✓ When I was a child, my parents told me that being organized was very important, so I kept my room tidy every day.

Tense consistency error: the sentence mixes past ('When I was a child', 'told me') with present ('is', 'keep'). Maintain past tense for habits in the past: change 'is' to 'was' and 'keep' to 'kept'. Also singular 'room' fits context of one room; add a comma after the introductory clause for clarity.

× Did you use to keep your room tidy as a child?

✓ Did you use to keep your room tidy as a child?

No correction needed: this question correctly uses 'did you use to' to ask about a past habitual action. Included only because it resembles modal/past habit forms; keep as is.

× I think keeping my rooms tidy could make me feel less stressed and more comfortable.

✓ I think keeping my room tidy could make me feel less stressed and more comfortable.

Number agreement and clarity: 'rooms' likely refers to the student's own single room; use singular 'room'. The gerund 'keeping' is correctly used here. No tense error.

× My parents told me being organized is very important when I was a child.

✓ My parents told me that being organized was very important when I was a child.

Tense consistency: mix of past ('told me', 'was a child') with present 'is' should be past 'was'. Add 'that' for clarity. This keeps the report of past speech in past tense.

× I usually keep my study space neat by organizing my books on the shelf and arranging the notes on the folders.

✓ I usually keep my study space neat by organizing my books on the shelf and arranging the notes in my folders.

Preposition choice: 'on the shelf' is OK for books but 'on the folders' is incorrect; use 'in my folders'. Also specify 'my folders' for clarity. Tense is correct (present habitual).

× Having a tidy desk makes me concentrate and stay focused when I study.

✓ Having a tidy desk helps me concentrate and stay focused when I study.

Verb choice: 'makes me concentrate' is grammatical but 'helps me concentrate' is more natural collocation. Tense and form are correct.

× Personally, I think being organized is a very important habit because it makes me feel comfortable and less stressed.

✓ Personally, I think being organized is a very important habit because it makes me feel comfortable and less stressed.

No grammatical correction needed: sentence is grammatically correct and appropriately in present tense.

× My parents told me when I was a child, so I keep my room tidy every day.

✓ My parents told me when I was a child, so I have kept my room tidy every day since then.

Tense and aspect: original mixes past ('told me') with simple present ('I keep') awkwardly. Use present perfect 'have kept' with 'since then' to indicate a habit continuing from past to present. This clarifies timeline and maintains consistency.