Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: remove small grammar mistakes, avoid repetition, and add a linking word to connect ideas. Also use precise vocabulary (e.g., “clutter-free” and “stress-free”). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I like to keep things tidy. I usually return items to their proper places after using them, which keeps my space clutter-free. As a result, I feel less stressed and more focused.

提案: Correct past-time expressions and comparative phrasing, and add a linking phrase to explain the change. Avoid repeating the same routine verbatim; give one specific detail or short example.

例: No, my room was quite messy when I was a child. However, as I grew older I learned to tidy up regularly; for example, I now always put toys and books back on the shelf after I finish using them.

提案: Make the answer more structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific methods and a brief reason. Fix tense issues and avoid repeating the same phrase. Use linking words like “because” or “so”.

例: I keep my study space tidy by storing stationery in labeled drawers and clearing my desk at the end of each day. Because I grew up in an orderly home, these habits come naturally to me, and they help me feel focused and confident.

提案: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with one or two clear reasons and a linking word. Remove filler words like “uh” and avoid repeating adjectives. Use precise language (e.g., “necessary” vs “essential”).

例: I don't think being tidy is strictly necessary for everyone, but I prefer a tidy environment because it helps me concentrate and feel more comfortable. For instance, a clear desk makes it easier for me to focus on work.

× Yes, I do like to the keep things tidy.

✓ Yes, I do like to keep things tidy.

The sentence has an unnecessary definite article 'the' before the verb phrase and incorrect word order. Remove 'the' and place 'to keep' together. Use 'do like to keep' for emphasis: 'I do like to keep things tidy.' (Type corresponds to sentence structure/article issues: Grammar Problem Type IDs 22 and 26).

× I have a habit of returning things back to the space where it belongs.

✓ I have a habit of returning things to the space where they belong.

'Returning' already implies 'back', so 'back' is redundant. Also, 'things' is plural, so the relative clause must use the plural pronoun 'they' and plural verb 'belong', not 'it belongs'. Correct: 'returning things to the space where they belong.' (Type IDs 1 and 11).

× This helps the environment clutter free and stress free.

✓ This helps keep the environment clutter-free and stress-free.

The phrase needs a verb 'keep' to connect 'helps' with the adjectives, and compound adjectives should be hyphenated: 'clutter-free' and 'stress-free'. Also add 'the' before 'environment' for specificity. (Type IDs 13 and 17).

× No, my room was rather messy than tidy in my childhood.

✓ No, my room was rather messy rather than tidy in my childhood.

The intended contrast requires the phrase 'rather messy rather than tidy' or simply 'more messy than tidy'. Using 'rather' before both parts or using 'more... than' makes the comparison correct. (Type ID 25).

× I developed a habit after growing up to keep things tidy.

✓ I developed the habit of keeping things tidy as I grew up.

Sequence and phrasing are awkward. Use 'developed the habit of keeping' (gerund after 'of') and 'as I grew up' to indicate gradual development in the past. (Type IDs 8 and 6).

× For example, I put back things where they belong after I used them.

✓ For example, I put things back where they belong after I use them.

Place 'back' after the object: 'put things back'. Use present simple 'use' when describing habitual actions ('after I use them') rather than past 'used'. (Type IDs 20 and 6).

× I keep my workspace and my home tidy by putting things back where they belong after I use them.

✓ I keep my workspace and home tidy by putting things back where they belong after I use them.

Using both 'my workspace and my home' is acceptable, but 'my workspace and home' is more natural; remove the redundant 'my'. Otherwise sentence is fine. (Type ID 26).

× I developed this habit after I'd grown up in a tidy environment.

✓ I developed this habit after I grew up in a tidy environment.

Past perfect 'I'd grown up' is unnecessary because there's no earlier past reference; simple past 'I grew up' is appropriate. Use consistent simple past sequencing: developed after I grew up. (Type ID 5).

× I think it's not absolutely necessary uh to be tidy, but I prefer a tidy space for me to spend time.

✓ I don't think it is absolutely necessary to be tidy, but I prefer a tidy space to spend time in.

Negative opinion is more naturally expressed as 'I don't think it is...'. Remove filler 'uh'. 'For me to spend time' is awkward; use 'to spend time in' to show purpose/location. (Type IDs 4 and 26).

× I feel sharp and confident and very comfortable in a tidy space.

✓ I feel sharp, confident, and very comfortable in a tidy space.

List items should be separated with commas; removing the extra 'and' before 'confident' makes the list natural. No article change needed. (Type ID 13)}]} (Note: grammar_problem_type_id values correspond to multiple IDs discussed in explanations)