Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep to under five sentences. Focus on accuracy with verbs and determiners (e.g., "it helps me", "when they belong").

例: Yes, I do. I keep my room tidy because it helps me focus and reduces stress. For example, I put items back in their place and tidy my desk at the end of each day so I can start the next day without distractions.

提案: Answer directly with correct tense and clearer organization. If uncertain about the past, state that and give a concise reason or example in past tense. Use linking words like "because" and correct word order. Avoid filler phrases and incomplete sentences.

例: I’m not sure I remember exactly, but I usually kept my room tidy as a child because my mother insisted I clean it every day. Because of that routine, I learned to put things away and keep things organized.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence describing your routine, then list one or two specific actions using linking words. Use correct verbs and concise phrasing. Avoid contradictory or unclear phrases like "reduce my potential" and "whenever if". Explain how the actions help your focus.

例: I keep my study space tidy by clearing my desk every evening and storing notes in labeled folders. This routine helps me find materials quickly and prevents distractions, so I can concentrate better when I study.

提案: Respond with a concise opinion and give a specific reason using correct grammar. Use linking words like "because" and a clear example. Avoid vague statements and repetition. Keep it to two or three sentences max.

例: Yes, I believe being tidy is important because it saves time. For instance, when I need a book, I know exactly where it is, so I don’t waste time searching for it.

× I like to keep my room tidy because it brings organized help me to focus better and reduce my stress.

✓ I like to keep my room tidy because it brings organization and helps me to focus better and reduce my stress.

The phrase 'brings organized help me' mixes adjective and verb forms incorrectly. Use the noun 'organization' instead of 'organized', and use the verb 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also include 'and' to connect parallel verbs 'helps' and 'reduce'. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× For example, I always put things back when they belongs to and tidy my desk at the end of the day.

✓ For example, I always put things back where they belong and tidy my desk at the end of the day.

'They belongs to' is incorrect: 'they' is plural so the verb must be 'belong' (no -s). The phrase 'when they belong to' is awkward; use 'where they belong' to indicate the correct location. This fixes pronoun-verb agreement and word choice. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× Well, I don't remember that much, but I do keep my room tidy when I was kids because in back of in because my mother told always that you should clean your room every day and it helps you to organize and.

✓ Well, I don't remember that much, but I did keep my room tidy when I was a child because my mother always told me that you should clean your room every day and it helps you get organized.

This sentence mixes present and past incorrectly. Use past tense 'did keep' and 'was a child' for childhood. 'My mother told always' should be 'my mother always told me' for correct word order and inclusion of object pronoun. Replace 'organize and' with 'get organized' to complete the idea. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Ideally keep my space steady or workplace tidy because clean because it will helps me to focus on my work whenever if there is an organised it will reduce my potential and also focus I have I've been distracted by that cleaning.

✓ I try to keep my study space or workplace tidy because being clean helps me focus on my work; if the area is organized, it reduces distractions and helps me concentrate.

The original is fragmented and repetitive. Rearrange into a clear subject-verb structure: 'I try to keep...' Use 'being clean helps' rather than 'because clean because it will helps'. 'Helps' must match singular subject. Replace 'reduce my potential' with 'reduces distractions' to convey intended meaning. Remove redundant phrases and correct word order. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Yes, I think it is necessary or crucial to keep clean and organized because it will reduce your time.

✓ Yes, I think it is necessary and crucial to keep things clean and organized because it will save you time.

'Keep clean and organized' needs an object (things). Use 'and' rather than 'or' to express both ideas. 'Reduce your time' is unnatural; 'save you time' is the correct idiom. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× Whenever you want to want something like a book you went to, you know the place where it keeps always.

✓ Whenever you want something, like a book, you know where it is kept.

The sentence has incorrect verbs and pronouns: 'want to want' is redundant; 'you went to' is wrong form. Use 'you know where it is kept' for correct passive placement of the book and natural word order. This fixes pronoun/reference and verb usage. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× So it is necessary, it will consume.

✓ So it is necessary because it saves time and makes daily tasks easier.

'It will consume' is incomplete and unclear. Replace with a clear result clause that explains why tidiness is necessary. This corrects sentence fragmentation and clarifies meaning. Grammar problem type ID: 26