Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid odd idioms (e.g. “proud as Peacock”), correct grammar (e.g. “passionate about keeping things tidy”), and give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy keeping things tidy because it makes me feel organized and calm. For example, a neat home helps me find things quickly and reduces stress. Furthermore, keeping surfaces clean prevents dust and germs, which is better for my health.

提案: Use correct tense and simpler phrasing. Begin with a direct answer about the past, then add a specific example or reason. Fix grammar: “I preferred/liked being clean” and “my room gave me a positive vibe.” Keep to 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I did. As a child I always kept my room tidy because a clean space made me feel happy and focused. For instance, I would arrange my toys every evening so I could easily start playing the next day.

提案: Good answer: clear and specific. Improve by correcting verb forms and using linking words (first, then, finally) for coherence. Keep sentences concise and natural. Add one brief example or routine detail to enrich the answer.

例: I keep my study space tidy by following a simple routine. First, I arrange books by subject and put stationery in a drawer; then I wipe the desk surface. Finally, I do a quick tidy-up at the end of each day so I can start fresh the next morning.

提案: Answer directly and avoid grand words like “cardinal thing.” Use clear reasons and add a specific result or example. Correct grammar: “it makes a good impression,” “helps people feel confident.” Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I think being tidy is important because it creates a good impression and helps people feel confident. For example, a tidy outfit and workspace can make someone seem more professional and approachable in job interviews or meetings.

× Well, I'm absolutely passionate about keep things tidy because it helps me to feel as proud as Peacock that I manage my things wisely and with cleanliness.

✓ Well, I'm absolutely passionate about keeping things tidy because it helps me feel as proud as a peacock that I manage my things wisely and keep them clean.

After 'passionate about' the verb should be in the -ing (gerund) form, so 'keep' becomes 'keeping'. Also 'helps me to feel' is more natural as 'helps me feel'. 'As proud as Peacock' needs an article and lowercase for 'peacock' and the metaphor requires 'a peacock'. 'With cleanliness' is awkward; replace with 'keep them clean' to show what is being kept clean.

× It also helps me to save from various health issues which are getting from dirty things.

✓ It also helps me avoid various health issues that arise from dirty environments.

Use 'helps me avoid' rather than 'helps me to save from'. 'Which are getting from dirty things' is ungrammatical; use 'that arise from' or 'caused by' and 'dirty environments' is clearer than 'dirty things'.

× Candidly speaking, I'm absolutely prefer cleanliness since my childhood.

✓ Candidly speaking, I have absolutely preferred cleanliness since my childhood.

'Prefer' is a stative verb and when referring to a period from the past until now use the present perfect: 'have preferred'. Also 'I'm absolutely prefer' is incorrect because present continuous cannot combine with 'prefer' here.

× I like managed and organized things with cleanliness as a child.

✓ I liked managing and organizing things neatly as a child.

To describe past habits use the past tense 'liked'. Use gerunds 'managing' and 'organizing' after 'liked'. 'With cleanliness' is awkward; 'neatly' or 'tidily' is better.

× In my past day when I was a child, I always keep my room clean because the clean room give me a positive and a marvelous vibes.

✓ When I was a child, I always kept my room clean because a clean room gave me positive and marvelous vibes.

Use simple past 'kept' for habitual actions in the past. 'In my past day' is unnatural; use 'When I was a child'. 'The clean room give' has subject-verb disagreement; use 'gave'. 'A positive and a marvelous vibes' combines singular articles with plural 'vibes' and is redundant; use 'positive and marvelous vibes' without 'a'.

× Frankly speaking, I like to keep my study and workplace tidy because a clutter free desk helped me concentrate and be more productive.

✓ Frankly speaking, I like to keep my study and workplace tidy because a clutter-free desk helps me concentrate and be more productive.

The sentence describes a general truth, so use present tense 'helps' not past 'helped'. Also hyphenate 'clutter-free'.

× I arranged my books in order, put stationery in a drawer and do a quick tidy up at the end of each day so everything is ready for the next session.

✓ I arrange my books in order, put stationery in a drawer and do a quick tidy-up at the end of each day so everything is ready for the next session.

Maintain present simple to match habitual routine: 'arrange', 'put', 'do'. 'Tidy up' as a noun here is better hyphenated 'tidy-up' or keep verb form 'tidy up'.

× According to my perspective, being tidy is a cardinal thing in every individual life because it also put great impression of a human being on others.

✓ In my view, being tidy is important in every individual's life because it also makes a good impression on others.

'According to my perspective' is wordy; use 'In my view'. 'Cardinal thing' is unnatural; use 'important'. 'In every individual life' needs possessive: 'every individual's life'. 'Put great impression of a human being on others' is ungrammatical; use 'makes a good impression on others'.

× Being tidy helps individual to be confidence and also being attractive to others.

✓ Being tidy helps individuals to be confident and also appear more attractive to others.

Use plural 'individuals' or 'an individual' consistently. 'To be confidence' should be 'to be confident' (adjective). 'Also being attractive' should be 'appear more attractive' or 'be more attractive' to convey meaning clearly.