Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons or an example, and use linking words to join ideas. Avoid repetition and correct minor grammar (e.g., 'a lot of work', 'in chaos').

例: Not really. I find keeping things tidy quite time-consuming, so I often let minor messes build up. For example, I usually leave clothes on a chair after work, and I only tidy them when the pile becomes too big.

提案: Answer directly, then give one clear reason and a brief example. Use past tense correctly and avoid repetition ('didn’t didn't'). Replace vague phrases with specific details ('didn't spend much time').

例: No, I didn't. I was quite lazy as a child, so I rarely cleaned my room; for instance, toys often stayed on the floor for weeks until my parents asked me to tidy them.

提案: Provide a clear, relevant answer and expand with a routine or a strategy (even if it's weak). Use consistent tense and avoid filler words. If you don't keep it tidy, explain consequences or any small habits you do have to manage clutter.

例: Honestly, I don't keep it very tidy. I tend to pile papers on one side of the desk, but when I need to focus I clear the immediate working area and put away distractions.

提案: Express your opinion clearly and support it with a brief reason and an example. Use correct grammar and connectors (e.g., 'however', 'but', 'because'). Avoid repeating words. Consider acknowledging the opposing view for balance.

例: I don't think tidy equals productive; although a tidy desk can help some people concentrate, for me results matter more than appearance. For example, I can produce good work even when my desk is a bit messy, as long as I have a clear plan.

× No, I think it is really difficult and it is a lot work to make things tidy and when things are in a chaos I don't really care.

✓ No, I think it is really difficult and it is a lot of work to make things tidy, and when things are in chaos I don't really care.

'a lot work' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'a lot of work' (quantifier + of). 'in a chaos' is incorrect because 'chaos' is an uncountable noun here and does not take the article 'a' — use 'in chaos'. Also added a comma for clarity. These are present-tense description issues and article/quantifier use; improve by memorizing common collocations: 'a lot of' + noun and that some nouns (chaos, information) are uncountable and do not take 'a'.

× No, I didn't. I wasn't very good at cleaning and I was very, I was a very lazy boy, so I didn't didn't pay a lot time to clean my house.

✓ No, I didn't. I wasn't very good at cleaning and I was a very lazy boy, so I didn't pay much time to clean my room.

The sentence had a repeated auxiliary 'didn't didn't' (duplication error) and used 'a lot time' incorrectly. For past habits use past tense 'didn't pay' and the correct expression is 'pay much time' or better 'spend much time' or 'spend a lot of time'. Also 'house' is less natural when referring to a child's bedroom; 'room' fits the context. To improve, avoid repeating words, use 'spend a lot of time' for time duration, and ensure tense consistency for past habits.

× Umm, I didn't. I don't keep my work or study space tidy, uh.

✓ Umm, I didn't when I was younger, and I don't keep my work or study space tidy now.

The original mixes past negative 'I didn't' without completing the idea and then uses present 'I don't' without context. To be clear, separate past habit from current habit. Maintain tense clarity: 'I didn't when I was younger' for past, and 'I don't keep... tidy' for present. Also avoid trailing fillers; be explicit about time references.

× No, I don't think so. Umm your your study or workspace is tidy doesn't means you did a great, you do a great job in your work or you study well.

✓ No, I don't think so. Just because your study or workspace is tidy doesn't mean you did a great job at work or that you study well.

Several issues: 'doesn't means' is subject-verb agreement error for modal/catenation and should be 'doesn't mean' (base form after auxiliary does). Repetition 'your your' removed. 'You did a great, you do a great job' is awkward; clarified to 'did a great job at work' or 'that you study well'. Also added 'Just because' to convey the causal relation. Improve by remembering that after auxiliaries like 'does' the main verb is in base form and by structuring comparative clauses clearly.