Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: You're clear and relevant, but make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail. Avoid repetition (e.g. 'concentrate' said twice) and correct small grammar issues ('daily test' seems odd — use 'daily tasks' or 'studies'). Use a linking word to connect reason and example.

例: Yes, I do. Keeping things tidy helps me concentrate on my daily tasks, so I always keep my desk clear of rubbish and arrange my books neatly to avoid distractions.

提案: Good content and a clear past reference, but improve grammar and natural phrasing. Use a concise topic sentence in the past tense, then give one specific, vivid detail. Fix agreement errors ('place it' → 'place them') and avoid awkward phrases like 'irritating to the eyes' — say 'untidy' or 'cluttered'. Add a linking word to show cause or result.

例: Yes, I did. My mum taught me to tidy my room, so I used to put my toys in a box in the corner to keep the floor clear and make the room look neater.

× Yes, I like to keep my things organized and tidy because it helps me better concentrate on my daily test.

✓ Yes, I like to keep my things organised and tidy because it helps me concentrate better on my daily tasks.

The phrase 'concentrate on my daily test' uses the wrong noun and word order. Use the preposition 'on' with 'concentrate' (correct), but 'daily test' is likely unintended; 'daily tasks' is more natural. Also, adverb placement: 'concentrate better' is less natural than 'concentrate better on my daily tasks' or 'concentrate better' after the verb; here 'concentrate better on my daily tasks' is clear. Use 'organised' for Australian English spelling. Suggestions: replace 'daily test' with 'daily tasks' and move 'better' after 'concentrate' if you keep it; prefer 'concentrate better on my daily tasks'.

× For example, I make sure that my table is free from trash or messy books and other reference materials so I can concentrate better without interruption.

✓ For example, I make sure that my desk is free of rubbish, messy books and other reference materials so I can concentrate without interruption.

The preposition 'free from' is acceptable but 'free of' is more natural here. 'Table' is often better as 'desk' in this context. Use 'rubbish' for Australian English and avoid 'concentrate better without interruption' — 'concentrate without interruption' is clearer. Also remove the extra comma before 'and' only if not needed; the sentence as corrected is natural. Suggestions: use 'free of' and 'desk', and prefer 'concentrate without interruption'. Keep Australian spelling 'rubbish'.

× Yes, as a child, my mom taught me to organize my things.

✓ Yes, as a child my mum taught me to organise my things.

'Mom' is American spelling; in Australian English 'mum' is standard. The comma after 'child' is optional; removing it makes the sentence flow better. Also use 'organise' for Australian spelling. This is primarily a register/spelling issue rather than a grammatical error, but it affects correctness in the requested variety. Suggestions: use Australian spelling 'mum' and 'organise'.

× For example, she let me pick up my toys and place it on the corner to make my room free from any unwanted things that are irritating to the eyes.

✓ For example, she let me pick up my toys and place them in the corner to make my room free of any unwanted things that are irritating to the eye.

There is a pronoun agreement error: 'my toys' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'them' not 'it'. Use the preposition 'in the corner' rather than 'on the corner'. Use 'free of' instead of 'free from' (more natural), and 'irritating to the eye' is the idiomatic expression (singular). Also use Australian spelling if adjusting other words. Suggestions: change 'it' to 'them', use 'in the corner', 'free of', and 'irritating to the eye'.