Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural, correct grammar, use a topic sentence, add one or two specific supporting details with linking words, and avoid redundancy. Correct verb forms and pluralization (e.g., "things"), and replace unclear phrase "fight the thing" with a precise meaning such as "find things" or "avoid clutter".

例: Yes, I do. I usually keep my things tidy because it helps me find items quickly and saves time when I’m getting ready. For example, I sort my clothes by type and keep important documents in labeled folders, which reduces the time I spend searching for things.

提案: Answer directly and clearly with correct tense and sentence structure. Start with a topic sentence, then give a specific supporting detail and use linking words. Fix grammar ("I didn't" → "I didn’t") and phrasing ("my mom teased me about why I had to clean the room"). Complete the comparative thought ("It was more beneficial than ...").

例: No, I didn’t keep my room tidy when I was a child. My mother often teased me about why I had to clean, but she would sometimes organize my toys for me. Looking back, being tidier would have been more beneficial than leaving things scattered because it would have made finding toys easier and reduced arguments with my parents.

× I usually organize the thing tidy because it help me fight the thing easily and save time.

✓ I usually keep things tidy because it helps me find things easily and saves time.

Multiple errors: 'the thing' is incorrect; use plural 'things' to refer generally (Singular and plural issue ID 1). 'Organize ... tidy' is awkward; use 'keep things tidy'. 'Help' should be 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'it' referring to the habit or practice (Subject-verb agreement/Third person singular issue ID 27 and 2) so use 'helps'. 'Fight the thing' is wrong word choice; the intended meaning is 'find things'. Also add 'saves' to agree with singular subject. Suggestion: use 'keep things tidy', 'find things', and make verbs agree with the subject.

× I usually organize the thing tidy because it help me fight the thing easily and save time.

✓ I usually keep things tidy because it helps me find things easily and saves time.

The verb forms 'help' and 'save' should be 'helps' and 'saves' because the dummy subject 'it' (referring to the habit) is third person singular and requires -s in the present simple (Third person singular issue ID 2). Also 'organize the thing tidy' is unidiomatic; use 'keep things tidy'.

× I usually organize the thing tidy because it help me fight the thing easily and save time.

✓ I usually keep things tidy because it helps me find things easily and saves time.

'Organize ... tidy' is not the correct collocation; 'keep ... tidy' is the usual phrase (preposition/word choice ID 11). 'Fight the thing' is incorrect phrase; intended verb is 'find' not 'fight'. Replace with 'find things'.

× No I didn't when I was younger but my mom teased me about why am I have to clean the room.

✓ No, I didn't when I was younger, but my mom teased me about why I had to clean the room.

The clause 'why am I have to clean the room' mixes question order and tense. In reported or embedded clauses use statement word order and past tense: 'why I had to clean the room' (Past tense issue ID 5 and Incorrect use of pronouns/word order ID 12/26). Also add commas for clarity.

× It's more beneficial than.

✓ It's more beneficial that way.

The original is incomplete: 'more beneficial than' needs a comparison object (Sentence structure errors ID 26 and Comparative error ID 25). Likely intended meaning is 'that way' or 'to keep it tidy is more beneficial', so use 'It's more beneficial that way.'