Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, sentence structure and fluency. Give a clear topic sentence, then one or two supporting details linked logically. Correct word order and articles, use present simple or present continuous correctly, and avoid fragments. Be specific about frequency and what ‘tidy’ means to you.

例: Yes, I like to keep things tidy. I usually clean my house at the weekend and do small chores every day, such as washing dishes and putting clothes away, because a neat environment helps me feel calm and focused.

提案: Fix past habit expression and grammar, and give a clear reason with linking words. Use 'used to' correctly for past habits, avoid fragments and incorrect vocabulary like 'house calls'. Offer a concise supporting detail or example.

例: No, I didn't use to keep my room tidy when I was a child. I was quite messy because my parents didn't make me do chores, so I rarely put toys away or made my bed.

× Yes, I usually clean my house weekends and I. Always require my clothes to be neat.

✓ Yes, I usually clean my house on weekends, and I always require my clothes to be neat.

Missing preposition 'on' before 'weekends' and incorrect sentence split/punctuation. The adverb 'always' should be placed before the verb 'require'. Combine into one sentence with proper punctuation and word order: 'clean my house on weekends' and 'I always require my clothes to be neat'. Use present simple for habitual actions.

× No, I was quite clumsy when I was a child because I my parents didn't force me to do much more house calls so that.

✓ No, I was quite clumsy when I was a child because my parents didn't force me to do many household chores.

The sentence has word order problems and wrong vocabulary. Remove the extra 'I' and replace 'much more house calls so that' with 'many household chores' to express tasks done at home. Use 'many' with plural countable noun 'chores'. The clause now correctly explains the reason in past tense and maintains clear structure.