Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, use correct grammar, and organize ideas with a clear topic sentence plus specific supporting details. Avoid fillers (uh) and incorrect word choices. For example, say you enjoy keeping things tidy, explain how you do it (e.g., cleaning schedule, where items go), and give a brief reason. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I like to keep things tidy. I clean my room every weekend and put items in designated places, such as books on the shelf and clothes in the wardrobe, because a tidy space helps me concentrate better.

提案: Give a clear past-focused topic sentence, use correct past tense, and avoid unclear or incorrect words. Provide one or two specific examples of what you did as a child and a short reason. Use linking words like 'when' or 'so' for coherence.

例: Yes, I used to keep my room tidy when I was a child. I always put my toys in boxes and arranged my books by size, so my parents could find things easily and I knew where everything belonged.

× I always clean my room and uh, every single things.

✓ I always clean my room and every single thing.

The noun 'things' is preceded by the quantifier 'every single', which requires a singular noun. Use 'every single thing' not 'every single things'. Tip: after 'every' or 'every single', use singular countable nouns.

× I will uh, adjust it.

✓ I will adjust it.

This sentence had an unnecessary filler 'uh' but grammatically 'will adjust' is fine for future intent. No present participle is needed. Keep 'I will adjust it' for clarity.

× There are no places.

✓ There are no places for things.

The original sentence 'There are no places' is incomplete and ambiguous. Adding 'for things' clarifies the meaning: no places to put items. This corrects the sentence structure by specifying the object of 'places'.

× Yes, when I was child, umm, I didn't match my room.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I didn't keep my room tidy.

Missing article 'a' before 'child' and the verb phrase 'didn't match my room' is incorrect. The intended meaning is likely 'didn't keep my room tidy'. Use past tense 'didn't keep' and include the article: 'when I was a child'.

× I always I want to do tidy and Nathan's clean in my room.

✓ I always wanted to tidy and keep my room clean.

The original mixes present 'want' with past context and contains unclear word 'Nathan's'. Use past tense 'wanted' to match 'when I was a child', and use correct verbs 'tidy' and 'keep ... clean'. Ensure word choice matches intended meaning.

× Umm, I, I just did every single product with their own places.

✓ I just put every single item in its own place.

Word choice and structure are incorrect: 'did every single product' is unnatural. Use 'put' for placing items and 'its own place' (singular possessive) for each item. 'Their' should agree with singular 'every single item'.

× I didn't mesh anything.

✓ I didn't mix anything up.

The verb 'mesh' is incorrect here; likely intended 'mix up' meaning to mess up or mix items together. Use 'anything' with 'didn't' is fine. Also 'mix anything up' or 'mess anything up' are natural expressions.