Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a clear, grammatical topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details linked with simple connectors. Avoid long lists and incorrect words. Focus on past tense and correct vocabulary (e.g., cartoons, reading stories, playing with friends).

例: No, I didn’t like going to parks as a child. Instead, I preferred staying at home because I enjoyed watching cartoons and reading storybooks, and I often played games with my friends indoors.

提案: Answer directly and use a clear reason with correct grammar and vocabulary. Use linking words such as ‘because’ and keep the sentence structure simple. Say whether you dislike parks now and give one concrete reason (e.g., crowded, noisy, many pets).

例: No, I don’t like going to parks now because they are usually very crowded at weekends and there are many dogs, which makes me uncomfortable.

提案: Be consistent: if you say you want more parks, explain why even if you personally won’t visit them. Use linking words (for example, ‘because’, ‘but’) and correct nouns ('parks'). Provide one specific benefit of more parks for the city. Keep it to two sentences maximum.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they improve air quality and provide green spaces for families. However, I might still prefer staying at home and not visiting them often.

提案: Give a clear, grammatical reply. If unsure, say so and then give a brief reason. Use correct words (e.g., ‘public parks’) and simple linking phrases. Avoid confusing vocabulary and maintain tense consistency when talking about future plans.

例: I’m not sure; I don’t have any specific parks in mind for the future because I generally don’t enjoy public parks. If a quiet, well-maintained park opened nearby, I might consider visiting.

× No, I prefer inside the home and watching cartoon movie reading story bulb playing with my friend inside my home as a child.

✓ No, I preferred staying inside the house, watching cartoons, reading stories and playing with my friends at home when I was a child.

The original sentence has several preposition and word-choice issues and incorrect verb forms. 'Prefer inside the home' should be 'preferred staying inside the house' (preposition and gerund). 'Watching cartoon movie' should be 'watching cartoons' or 'watching cartoon movies' (plural). 'Reading story bulb' is incorrect; likely intended 'reading stories'. 'Playing with my friend inside my home' should be 'playing with my friends at home' ('at' is the correct preposition for location, and plural 'friends' matches general childhood activities). Also tense should be past ('preferred' and 'was') to match 'as a child.' Use commas to separate activities for clarity.

× No, I don't like stay going to but because in weekend many people and children are full of pet.

✓ No, I don't like going to parks now because on weekends they are full of people and children with pets.

The original sentence has pronoun and verb form issues. 'I don't like stay going to' mixes forms; use 'I don't like going to' (gerund after 'like'). 'But because' is redundant; remove 'but.' 'In weekend' should be 'on weekends' (correct preposition and plural). 'Many people and children are full of pet' is ungrammatical; better: 'they are full of people and children with pets' — 'they' refers to parks (pronoun needed), and 'with pets' correctly expresses possession. Ensure subject reference is clear.

× Yes, I would like to see more part in my city and but I don't want to go.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city, but I don't want to go to them.

The sentence uses incorrect noun 'part' instead of 'parks' and has redundant conjunctions ('and but'). Also missing preposition at the end: 'go to them.' Use comma before 'but' and correct noun and phrase order. The corrected sentence keeps conditional meaning (would like) while clarifying the contradiction (wanting more parks but not wanting to visit them).

× No, I am not sure but I don't like stay publish part.

✓ No, I'm not sure, but I don't like staying in public parks.

Multiple errors: 'I don't like stay' should be 'I don't like staying' (gerund). 'Publish part' is incorrect; intended 'public park(s)'. Use 'in' with 'parks' for location: 'staying in public parks.' Add comma before 'but' for readability and contraction 'I'm' is acceptable. Plural 'parks' suits general statement.