Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear, grammatical and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct verb tenses, and avoid repetition. Add one supporting detail with a linking word (e.g., because) and a specific example of an activity you enjoyed. Keep answers under five sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I enjoyed going to a park called Fox Park when I was seven because it had a large playground and a pond where I fed ducks.

提案: Avoid repeating words and irrelevant age information. Give a clear reason and one specific detail about what you enjoy now, using a linking word (because/so) to connect ideas. Keep it concise and grammatical.

例: Yes, I do. I still like visiting parks because they are peaceful and I can ride my bike on the paths.

提案: Answer the question directly and use correct sentence structure. If you mean you would like more parks, say so and give a specific reason (e.g., for recreation or green space). Use linking words (however, because) and avoid unclear phrases like 'I don't see more facts.'

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because we only have one park and more green spaces would give families places to relax and children places to play.

提案: Provide a clear, grammatical response with a specific park or country and a reason why you want to visit. Use linking words to add detail (for example, because or so) and avoid short fragmented sentences.

例: Yes, I would like to visit parks in Australia, such as the Royal Botanic Garden in Sydney, because I want to see unique plants and enjoy the coastal views.

× Yes I did. I like going to Fox as a child when I am I was seven years old.

✓ Yes, I did. I liked going to Fox as a child when I was seven years old.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses. The speaker refers to childhood (past), so use past simple 'liked' and 'was'. Also remove the extraneous 'I am' and add commas for clarity.

× Yes, I do. I still like going to parks now because because. I am now 10 years old.

✓ Yes, I do. I still like going to parks now because I enjoy them. I am now 10 years old.

The first part correctly uses present simple for a current habit, but 'because because' is a repetition and incomplete. Provide a clear reason clause 'because I enjoy them.' Keep 'I am now 10 years old' in present simple to state current age.

× Uh, no, because. Our city is not parks, only one park in my city. Because I don't see more facts.

✓ Uh, no, because our city does not have many parks; there is only one park in my city. I have not seen any other parks.

The original has incorrect word order and wrong word choices ('is not parks', 'see more facts'). Use 'does not have many parks' and the existential 'there is only one park'. For the last sentence, use present perfect 'I have not seen' to indicate experience up to now and 'parks' instead of 'facts'.

× Yes, I am. I want to go to some parks in the future. I will go to park in Australia.

✓ Yes, I do. I want to visit some parks in the future. I will go to parks in Australia.

Reply to 'Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?' should use 'Yes, I do' not 'I am'. Use 'visit' as a collocation with 'parks'. Also use plural 'parks' or 'a park' with the article: 'I will go to parks in Australia' or 'I will go to a park in Australia.'