Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện phát âm từ vựng chính (ví dụ: "parks", "weekends"), sửa ngữ pháp và dùng từ chính xác (không dùng "pass" hoặc "business" ở đây). Trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp rồi thêm 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể. Hạn chế tiếng lấp ("uh").

例: Yes, I loved going to parks with my family when I was a child. We often spent our weekends there, taking long walks and feeding ducks by the pond, which created very happy memories.

提案: Giữ cấu trúc tốt nhưng cần chú ý số nhiều/số ít ("parks") và tránh tiếng lấp. Thêm một câu kết ngắn để liên kết ý và nêu lý do cụ thể hơn về lợi ích sức khỏe hoặc cảm xúc. Dùng từ vựng phong phú hơn như "unwind", "recharge".

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks in my free time because they help me relax and get fresh air. I often meet friends near my house to have a picnic or play badminton, which helps me unwind after a busy week.

提案: Sửa lỗi từ và cấu trúc ("to to have" -> "to have more parks"; "pass" -> "parks"). Trả lời trực tiếp với một câu chủ đề, sau đó nêu lợi ích cụ thể (sức khỏe, cộng đồng) và một ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh lặp từ và cải thiện liên kết giữa câu.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in Hanoi because they offer accessible spaces for exercise and relaxation. For example, a new park near my area would encourage more evening walks and help neighbours socialise.

提案: Ý tưởng tốt nhưng cần rõ ràng hơn về vai trò cá nhân ("create" sounds unusual — say "see more" or "help create"). Dùng liên từ để nối ý và mô tả chi tiết cụ thể (loại cây, tiện ích). Tránh lỗi từ vựng như "blend" khi muốn nói "plant".

例: In the future I would like to help create more parks and walking paths in my hometown so people can enjoy fresh air and relax. I would plant many native trees and add benches and shaded trails to make the area peaceful and welcoming.

× Uh, when I was a child I really liked going to pass with my family at 3 weekends.

✓ Uh, when I was a child I really liked going to parks with my family on weekends.

The noun 'pass' is incorrect; the correct plural noun is 'parks'. '3 weekends' is unnatural here: use the general phrase 'on weekends' for habitual past activities. Also use plural 'parks' to match meaning.

× We often took long walks and sometimes had business.

✓ We often took long walks and sometimes had picnics.

The word 'business' is incorrect in this context; likely intended 'picnics'. Maintain past tense 'took' and 'had' which is correct, but replace the noun to match meaning.

× So those are very happy memories.

✓ So those were very happy memories.

The speaker refers to past memories, so past tense 'were' should be used instead of present 'are'. Use past-tense agreement for consistency.

× Uh, yes of course. I still like going to park in my free time because it helps me relax and get some fresh air.

✓ Uh, yes of course. I still like going to the park in my free time because it helps me relax and get some fresh air.

When referring to a specific place in general use 'the park'. Omission of the definite article makes the noun phrase ungrammatical. Use 'the' before singular countable nouns when specific or known.

× I often hang out there with my friends near my house.

✓ I often hang out there with my friends who live near my house.

Original 'with my friends near my house' is ambiguous: it could mean friends accompany me near my house. Adding 'who live' clarifies the intended meaning. Alternatively 'near my house' could be placed after 'hang out there' but adding 'who live' resolves pronoun attachment.

× Sometimes we have a picnic or play badminton.

✓ Sometimes we have picnics or play badminton.

For repeated or habitual actions, use the plural noun 'picnics' to match 'sometimes' and general activity.

× Yes, I would like to to have more pass in Hanoi because they provide place for exercise and relaxation.

✓ Yes, I would like to have more parks in Hanoi because they provide places for exercise and relaxation.

Remove duplicate 'to'. Replace 'pass' with 'parks' (plural). Add plural 'places' and correct article usage; 'provide places' is natural. Ensure subject-verb agreement remains plural 'they provide'.

× For example, they are passed near my house and I often meet my friends there for a walk in the evening.

✓ For example, they are near my house and I often meet my friends there for a walk in the evening.

'Passed' is incorrect here; use 'are near' to indicate location. 'Passed' is a past participle of 'pass' and does not fit the intended meaning.

× Yes, in the future I would like to create parks and walking paths in my hometown so people can enjoy fresh air and relax.

✓ Yes, in the future I would like to create parks and walking paths in my hometown so people can enjoy fresh air and relax.

Sentence is grammatically correct for expressing future desire. No change necessary.

× I love trees, so I could blend many native trees to make the areas more peaceful.

✓ I love trees, so I could plant many native trees to make the areas more peaceful.

'Blend' is the wrong verb here; 'plant' is the correct verb for putting trees in the ground. 'Could' is acceptable for possibility; keep tense and modal usage.