Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer grammatically correct, concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb tenses and avoid filler sounds (uh).

例: Yes, I loved going to the park near my house when I was a child. I usually played there with my friends; for example, we often played hide-and-seek and climbed the trees near the swings.

提案: Use correct present tense and make the reason clear. Give a brief supporting detail with a linking word and avoid unnecessary phrases like 'listen now'.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Recently I have been going to the park near my house to walk and exercise because it helps me relax and stay fit.

提案: Express the opinion clearly and use accurate vocabulary and grammar. Replace vague or incorrect words (e.g. 'Greenspan', 'fish air') with precise phrases and give a specific reason introduced by a linking word (because/so).

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because more green spaces would improve air quality and reduce pollution, which would make the city healthier for everyone.

提案: Remove filler words, use correct adjectives and plural forms, and give a brief reason with linking words. Mention who you will go with and what activities you will do to make the answer specific.

例: In the future, I would like to visit Benzagatee Park because it is very beautiful and surrounded by trees and flowers. I plan to go there with a friend to run and walk together.

× Yes I did, I enjoy going the park near my house when I was a child.

✓ Yes I did. I enjoyed going to the park near my house when I was a child.

Mixing past and present tense: 'did' and 'was' indicate past, but 'enjoy' is present. Use past tense 'enjoyed'. Also missing preposition 'to' before 'the park'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for childhood activities and include correct preposition.

× I usually play with my friend.

✓ I usually played with my friends.

Childhood context requires past tense and likely plural 'friends' if more than one; original may be singular but common collocation is 'friends'. Error type per list focuses on singular/plural: use 'friends' if referring to multiple. Also change verb to past 'played' to match context.

× Uh expect for example I pay, hide and seek with my friend.

✓ For example, I used to play hide-and-seek with my friend.

Incorrect verb forms: 'pay' should be 'play' and game name requires hyphenation 'hide-and-seek'. Also 'used to' expresses habitual past action. The error matches verb+-ing/form and word choice. Suggest practicing common verb phrases for games.

× Yes I do. I still like go in the park.

✓ Yes I do. I still like going to the park.

After 'like' we need the gerund 'going', not the base verb 'go'. Also use preposition 'to' before 'the park'. This is a present tense habit, so 'like going to' is correct.

× Listen now, uh recently I go in the park near my house for walk and exercise is tell me.

✓ Recently I go to the park near my house for walking and exercise.

'Recently' indicates present perfect or simple present habit; 'go in the park' is wrong preposition, use 'go to the park'. 'for walk' needs gerund 'walking'. The trailing 'is tell me' is unclear and removed. Suggest: 'Recently I have been going to the park near my house for walking and exercise.' for better English.

× Yes, I like to see more park in my city because, uh, if I have a lot of Greenspan, it have fish air and no pollution.

✓ Yes, I'd like to see more parks in my city because, if there were a lot of green spaces, they would have fresh air and no pollution.

Multiple errors: 'see more park' needs plural 'parks' (singular/plural). 'Greenspan' seems intended 'green space' or 'green spaces' and is a countable/uncountable issue. Use conditional 'would' for hypothetical situation. 'it have' is incorrect subject-verb agreement and pronoun: use 'they would have'. 'fresh air' not 'fish air'. This matches article/plural and subject-verb agreement issues. Suggest practicing plural forms and conditionals.

× Uh, in the future I will go to Benzagatee park because it's beautiful pet and surrounded by tree and flower.

✓ In the future I will go to Benzagatee Park because it's beautiful and surrounded by trees and flowers.

Errors: 'pet' is wrong word; probably 'place' or 'park' so corrected to 'beautiful'. Missing 'and' placement fixed. 'tree' and 'flower' should be plural 'trees and flowers'. Capitalize proper noun 'Park'. Matches plural and word choice errors. Suggest using plural nouns for multiple items.

× I want to go with my friend for running and walking together.

✓ I want to go with my friends to run and walk together.

'for running and walking' is not natural here; use infinitives 'to run and walk' or gerunds properly. If referring to multiple friends, use 'my friends'; otherwise keep singular. Also 'together' redundant but acceptable. Suggest: 'to run and walk together' is more natural.