Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and use correct verb tenses. Start with a clear topic sentence, use one or two supporting details, and avoid repetition. Correct tense: use past simple for childhood habits (e.g., 'I used to...'). Add a linking word for coherence.

例: Yes. I used to go to the park a lot as a child because I loved playing outdoors. For example, I often played football with neighborhood children after school, which helped me make friends and stay active.

提案: Eliminate hesitations and reduce repetition. Use present simple for current habits and a linking word to connect reason and result. Correct grammar (e.g., 'helps me stay fit'). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I go there in my free time because it helps me stay fit and meet new people, which is good for my social life.

提案: Be specific about why more parks are useful and avoid filler words. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'would make us more creative' or 'help us build connections'). Provide one clear reason with an example or result.

例: Yes, I would. More parks would give people safe places to exercise and socialize, which could improve public health and strengthen community ties.

提案: Finish your thought and correct grammar: use present perfect for experience ('have never had the chance'). Be specific about what attracts you to the park. Use one or two sentences and avoid trailing off.

例: I would like to visit Niagara-on-the-Lake because I have never had the chance to go. I’m especially excited about its waterfront gardens and historic scenery, which I’ve seen in photos.

× Yes, as a child I used to be very active and I always want to play with the kids.

✓ Yes, as a child I used to be very active and I always wanted to play with the other kids.

The sentence mixes past habitual 'used to' with present simple 'want'. When speaking about past habits, use past tense consistently: 'wanted' matches 'used to'. Also 'the kids' is vague; 'the other kids' is more natural.

× Whenever I get time, I used to go nearby ground or a park so that I can meet new people and I can start playing a game.

✓ Whenever I had time, I used to go to the nearby ground or a park so that I could meet new people and start playing a game.

This sentence mixes present 'get' and modal 'can' with past habitual 'used to'. Use past forms: 'had time' and 'could'. Also add preposition 'to' before locations and remove redundant 'I' before 'start'.

× Certainly because, uh, from childhood, I have this habit whenever I get free time, I'm, I like to go to nearby park or ground so that, uh, I can meet new people and make connections.

✓ Certainly, because since childhood I have had this habit: whenever I get free time, I like to go to a nearby park or ground so that I can meet new people and make connections.

Use 'since childhood' with present perfect 'have had' to indicate an ongoing habit. Add article 'a' before 'nearby park' and include punctuation for clarity. The rest of the sentence correctly uses present tense for a current habit.

× It is really helping me to staying fit and, uh, making better connections.

✓ It really helps me stay fit and make better connections.

After 'helps' use the base verb without 'to' + -ing. 'Helping me to staying' is incorrect; use 'helps me stay'. Also simplify 'It is really' to 'It really' for natural speech.

× Yes, uh, I would like to see more parks in my city because uh, going to different places and uh, meeting new, new people is going to makes us creative and build new connections.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because going to different places and meeting new people will make us more creative and help build new connections.

The phrase 'is going to makes' has a verb agreement error: 'makes' should be base form 'make' after 'is going to' or better use 'will make'. Also 'going... and meeting' are subjects that require plural verbs; using 'will make' fits. Add 'more' before 'creative' and 'help' before 'build' for natural phrasing.

× I would like to visit Niagara on the Lake because I have never get chance in the past.

✓ I would like to visit Niagara-on-the-Lake because I have never had the chance in the past.

Present perfect 'have never' must be followed by past participle 'had', not base 'get'. Also include definite article 'the' before 'chance' and hyphenate the place name 'Niagara-on-the-Lake' for correct form.

× So if I get the chance I would like to visit that park because it's really.

✓ So if I get the chance, I would like to visit that park because it's really beautiful.

The sentence ends incomplete: 'because it's really' needs a complement (e.g., 'beautiful' or 'nice'). Add a comma after the conditional clause for clarity and complete the idea with an adjective.