Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more concise, correct grammar, and add one or two specific details. Start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, and avoid redundancy. Limit to 2–3 sentences and use linking words such as "because" or "so" for coherence.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because my mother enjoyed gardening and took me there every evening. We would play with other children on the grass and I still remember the large pond and the willow trees.

提案: Answer directly, correct tense and word order, and give a specific reason or example. Use linking words like "however" or "because" and keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks; however, I have less free time these days because of work. When I visit a park, I like sitting under a tree and remembering childhood walks with my family.

提案: Give a concise opinion with one clear reason and a specific example of benefit. Improve grammar and avoid repetition; use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

例: Yes, definitely, because more parks would improve air quality and provide places for exercise. For example, a new park near my neighborhood would give families a safe place for weekend walks and children’s play.

提案: Be specific about which parks or types of parks you want to visit and clarify your reasons. Fix grammar and redundancy; use one or two sentences with clear linking words like "because" or "so that".

例: Yes, I would like to visit large urban parks such as botanical gardens or city nature reserves because they have diverse trees and flowers. Visiting these places would help me relax and learn more about different plant species.

× Yes, I was fond of natural beauty when I was child and even my mother is fond of gardening and natural beauty so she always take to me park every evening and we enjoyed a lot of over there and I always make my friends in parks.

✓ Yes, I was fond of natural beauty when I was a child, and my mother is fond of gardening and natural beauty, so she always took me to the park every evening and we enjoyed ourselves a lot there, and I always made friends in the parks.

Errors: missing article before 'child' (use 'a child'); missing articles before 'park' (use 'the park' or 'parks' with context); incorrect verb forms 'take to me' and 'we enjoyed a lot' and 'I always make my friends'. These involve article errors and verb tense/agreement. Suggestions: add 'a' before 'child'; use 'took me to the park' for past habitual action; use 'enjoyed ourselves a lot there'; use 'made friends' for past tense. Ensure punctuation and conjunctions are corrected.

× Yes, I am so into it but nowadays we are not having much time to go for parks so.

✓ Yes, I am really into it, but nowadays we don't have much time to go to parks.

Errors: unnatural continuous present 'are not having' (use simple present 'do not have'); incorrect preposition 'go for parks' (use 'go to parks'); 'so.' is a sentence fragment. Suggestions: use simple present for general states, use 'to' with 'go', and remove dangling 'so'.

× But I think I love to go parks now as well because they refresh all the memories of my childhood.

✓ But I think I love going to parks now as well because they refresh all the memories of my childhood.

Errors: missing preposition/article with 'go parks' (should be 'going to parks' or 'go to parks'); gerund 'going' is more natural after 'love'. Suggestions: use 'love going to parks' and keep present simple for habitual actions.

× Yes definitely as I am environmental person so I love to explore more parks in my cities and want to experience every natural vibe in my city.

✓ Yes, definitely. As an environmentally conscious person, I love to explore more parks in my city and want to experience every natural vibe there.

Errors: missing article 'an' before 'environmental person'; awkward adjective 'environmental person' better 'environmentally conscious person'; mismatch 'parks in my cities' then 'in my city'—choose singular 'city' for consistency; missing 'there' to clarify location. Suggestions: use articles correctly and maintain consistent noun number and clearer adjective forms.

× I love parks so much because since my childhood I love walking around them.

✓ I have loved parks so much since my childhood because I love walking around them.

Errors: tense inconsistency: 'since my childhood I love' should use present perfect 'have loved' for an action from past until now; keep 'I love walking' for current habit. Suggestions: use present perfect with 'since' to show duration and present simple for habitual actions.

× Yes, I want to explore more parts in my future as in big cities there are huge parks with more variety of trees and flowers, so I want to visit them to connect to make to help me connect with nature and environment.

✓ Yes, I want to explore more parks in the future because in big cities there are huge parks with a greater variety of trees and flowers, so I want to visit them to help me connect with nature and the environment.

Errors: 'parts' should be 'parks' (word choice/pronoun error), awkward phrase 'in my future' better 'in the future'; 'more variety' -> 'a greater variety'; redundant 'to connect to make to help me connect' is unclear and repetitive; missing article 'the' before 'environment'. Suggestions: choose correct nouns, simplify redundant phrases, use 'in the future', and include articles where needed.