Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more natural and grammatically correct, use a clear topic sentence, limit to 3–4 concise sentences, and give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition and tense errors (use past tense consistently).

例: Yes, I loved going to parks with my grandparents when I was a child. We often walked around the lake and they told me stories about local festivals, which helped me learn about the community. Because of those visits, I always enjoyed spending time outdoors with them.

提案: Use correct verb forms and a clear structure: state your current habit, give a reason, and add a brief supporting detail. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'so' correctly.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks now. Because my job is hectic, I often go to a nearby park to relax and get fresh air, which helps me feel refreshed before returning to work.

提案: Start with a concise opinion sentence, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Use natural phrases (e.g. 'nature lover' → 'I love nature') and avoid awkward phrasing like 'share review each other'.

例: Definitely — I would like more parks in my city. I love nature and exploring new places, and parks give me opportunities to meet local people and learn about the neighbourhood.

提案: Answer directly naming the park or type of park you want to visit, use clearer linking words and fewer fillers ('uh', 'frankly'). Provide specific features that attract you and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I would like to visit the Riverside Park near my hometown in the future. I have heard it has a beautiful fountain, walking trails along the river and many flowerbeds, which sounds perfect for a relaxing weekend.

× Absolutely, When I was a child I usually prefer to go in the parks with my grandparents because it is a good time to spend together and they provide information about the social events and also share their experience with me.

✓ Absolutely. When I was a child I usually preferred to go to parks with my grandparents because it was a good time to spend together; they provided information about social events and shared their experiences with me.

Tense mismatch and wrong prepositions: 'When I was a child' sets the past time frame, so the verb 'prefer' should be past ('preferred'). 'Go in the parks' should be 'go to parks' (correct preposition). Also use past tense for related verbs: 'is' -> 'was', 'provide' -> 'provided', 'share' -> 'shared', and plural 'experiences'. Use punctuation to separate clauses for clarity.

× So I it was a quality time for me.

✓ So it was quality time for me.

Extra pronoun and word order: the sentence contained an unnecessary 'I'. In English we say 'it was quality time for me' or 'it was a quality time for me' (article optional depending on style). Remove the extra pronoun and keep appropriate article use.

× To be honest, I like to going park nowadays because I am working person and I feel bored from my hectic work.

✓ To be honest, I like going to parks nowadays because I am a working person and I feel bored from my hectic work.

Incorrect verb + -ing and preposition: 'like to going' mixes infinitive and -ing; use 'like going' or 'like to go'. 'Going park' needs preposition and plural: 'going to parks'. Missing article before 'working person': use 'a working person'.

× Then I prefer to going in a park to relax my mood and feel more fresh air that is my quality time.

✓ Then I prefer to go to a park to relax and get some fresh air; that is my quality time.

Incorrect verb form and prepositions: 'prefer to going' should be 'prefer to go' or 'prefer going'. 'going in a park' -> 'go to a park'. 'Relax my mood' is unnatural; use 'relax' or 'improve my mood'. 'Feel more fresh air' -> 'get some fresh air'.

× Definitely I would like to see more parks in my city because I am nature lover person as well as I love to explore new places and get information about the place and I also meet with the local people and share review each other.

✓ Definitely I would like to see more parks in my city because I am a nature-lover and I love to explore new places and learn about them. I also like to meet local people and exchange views with them.

Article and word choice errors: 'I am nature lover person' needs an article and hyphenation: 'a nature-lover' or 'a nature lover'. Redundant 'as well as' was simplified. 'Get information about the place' -> 'learn about them'. 'Meet with the local people and share review each other' is ungrammatical; use 'meet local people and exchange views with them'.

× Uh, frankly speaking, I love to go back in the future because it is, uh, located near my hometown.

✓ Uh, frankly speaking, I would love to go back in the future because it is located near my hometown.

Modal and collocation: 'I love to go back in the future' is awkward for future intention; use 'I would love to go back in the future'. Remove filler commas. 'It is located near my hometown' is fine otherwise.

× I heard from a many person about this park because there are various facilities available there, such as a fountain, river, flowers, and so on.

✓ I heard from many people about this park because there are various facilities available there, such as a fountain, a river, flowers, and so on.

Wrong quantifier and noun form: 'a many person' is incorrect; use 'many people' (plural). Also use articles where needed: 'a river'.