Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your response more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid tense mistakes (use past tense for childhood) and redundant phrases.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. I enjoyed the fresh air and trees, and I especially liked watching dogs playing there, which made visits fun and lively.

提案: Use consistent tense and correct verbs, and keep answers within a few clear sentences. Begin with a present-tense topic sentence, then give specific typical activities with linking words. Correct vocabulary (e.g., “play with dogs”) and plural/singular forms.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks now. I usually go on weekends to exercise, such as walking, jogging or playing tennis, and afterwards I often play with dogs I see there.

提案: Be concise and avoid repetition. Respond directly with one clear opinion sentence, then add a specific reason using a linking word. Use correct grammar for singular/plural and possessives.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my hometown because parks improve air quality and provide places for exercise and relaxation, as I’ve noticed in my current city.

提案: Use formal contractions and correct grammar (avoid “wanna”). Start with a direct statement about your desire, then give specific reasons and link them coherently. Mention the park name if possible and describe what appeals to you.

例: Yes, I would love to visit the parks near the Eiffel Tower in Paris because they offer stunning views of the landmark and a pleasant atmosphere where people relax and picnic.

× Yes, I really like to go into the park as a child because in the park is really natural and I got really fresh air from them and the most important thing that I like is the dog that walk around the park.

✓ Yes, I really liked going to the park as a child because the park was very natural and I got really fresh air from it; the most important thing I liked was the dog that walked around the park.

The student mixes present and past tenses and has subject-pronoun agreement issues. The question asks about childhood, so past tense is required (liked, went/going as a child, was). 'In the park is really natural' should be 'the park was very natural'. 'I got really fresh air from them' uses wrong plural pronoun for 'park' (use 'it'). 'The dog that walk' requires past tense 'walked'. Suggest: keep past tense consistently for childhood descriptions and match pronouns to singular nouns.

× Yes, I really enjoyed going to park when I have free times.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy going to the park when I have free time.

This sentence incorrectly mixes past and present tenses and misuses articles and quantifiers. The question asks about whether the student still likes parks now, so use present simple 'enjoy'. Use the definite article 'the park' and the uncountable noun 'free time' (not 'free times'). Suggest using present simple for habitual actions: 'I enjoy going to the park when I have free time.'

× I always go to the park every weekend to do some exercise like walking, jogging or tennis.

✓ I always go to the park every weekend to do some exercise like walking, jogging, or playing tennis.

The list mixes activities: 'tennis' needs a verb 'playing' to match other -ing activities, otherwise it is awkward. 'Do some exercise like walking, jogging' is acceptable, but parallel structure improves clarity. Suggest: use parallel gerunds and include articles where needed: 'playing tennis.'

× And after I finish my exercise, I go and pay with the dog.

✓ And after I finish my exercise, I go and play with the dog.

The verb 'pay' is incorrect contextually and is a wrong choice of word; likely intended 'play'. This is a lexical/pronoun-verb error: 'play with the dog' is idiomatic. Suggest using correct verb 'play'.

× Yes, of course. I would like to see more parks in my city, all my hometowns.

✓ Yes, of course. I would like to see more parks in my city and in my hometown.

'All my hometowns' is incorrect because the speaker likely means both the current city and their hometown; 'hometown' should be singular or rephrased. Also 'in my city, all my hometowns' is ungrammatical structure. Suggest: 'in my city and in my hometown.'

× Now I live in the city that have a lot of parks, so I really like it and I really want my hometown to have a lot of park like the city that I live in now.

✓ Now I live in a city that has a lot of parks, so I really like it and I really want my hometown to have a lot of parks like the city I live in now.

'City that have' should be 'city that has' to agree with singular subject. 'A lot of park' should be 'a lot of parks' for plural. Also 'the city that I live in now' can be shortened to 'the city I live in now.' Suggest ensuring subject-verb agreement (city/has) and correct plural for countable nouns (parks).

× I really wanna go to park in Paris that have the Eiffel Towers in there.

✓ I really want to go to a park in Paris that has the Eiffel Tower in it.

Multiple issues: 'wanna' is informal — use 'want to'. 'go to park' needs an article: 'go to a park'. 'that have' should be 'that has' to agree with 'a park'. 'the Eiffel Towers' is incorrect; there is one Eiffel Tower. Use 'the Eiffel Tower' and 'in it' or 'there' (prefer 'in it'). Suggest using standard forms, correct articles, and singular/plural agreement.

× Like I can see from the picture everyone sitting around the park and can see the Eiffel Tower as well so I really like that.

✓ From the picture, I can see everyone sitting around the park and seeing the Eiffel Tower as well, so I really like that.

Tense and parallelism: 'Like I can see' is colloquial; better 'From the picture, I can see'. Use parallel verb forms: 'sitting... and seeing' or restructure: 'I can see everyone sitting around the park and also seeing the Eiffel Tower.' Maintain present simple for a general observation. Suggest using clearer sentence starters and parallel gerunds for readability.