Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb tenses and avoid repetition. Give one brief supporting reason with a linking word. Use clearer vocabulary (e.g. 'prefer staying at home' rather than 'sleep fast').

例: No, I didn’t enjoy going to parks when I was a child. I preferred staying at home because I was shy and liked quiet activities, such as reading. Therefore, I rarely went outside to play.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and then specific supporting details using correct vocabulary and linking words. Fix grammar (e.g. 'come into nature' -> 'connect with nature') and choose correct nouns (e.g. 'trees and animals'). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy going to parks now because they help me connect with nature. For example, the air is fresh and I can relax among trees and see birds and other small animals.

提案: Answer directly, then support with a specific reason and a linking word. Correct unclear phrases (e.g. 'it decides the peace and air' -> 'they improve air quality and residents' wellbeing'). Avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I would. I think parks are important because they improve air quality and provide peaceful places for people to relax, so the city should have more of them.

提案: Begin with a full topic sentence (e.g. 'I would like to visit...'). Give specific details with correct vocabulary (e.g. 'plants and paths', 'a large lake'). Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid fragments.

例: I would like to visit Central Park in New York in the future because it is large and beautiful. For example, it has many walking paths, diverse plants, and a large lake where people can relax and enjoy nature.

× No, I didn't like to go to parks as a child.

✓ No, I didn't like going to parks as a child.

Use the -ing form after 'like' when referring to general preferences in the past; 'didn't like to go' is grammatically possible but less natural in this context. Use 'didn't like going' for habit or general preference. Suggestion: use 'didn't like going' for smoother, native-like phrasing.

× At the time I was a child, I don't like to go outside.

✓ At that time when I was a child, I didn't like to go outside.

Tense inconsistency: 'At the time I was a child' refers to the past, so 'don't like' should be past tense 'didn't like'. Also 'At the time I was a child' is awkward; 'At that time when I was a child' is clearer. Suggestion: match past tense for all verbs describing childhood habits.

× I like to stay at home and sleep fast.

✓ I liked to stay at home and sleep a lot.

The adverb 'fast' means quickly and does not collocate with 'sleep' to mean 'sleep a lot'. Since the sentence describes past habit, use past tense 'liked' and expression 'sleep a lot' or 'sleep a lot/for long' to convey the intended meaning. Suggestion: use appropriate collocations for verbs (sleep a lot, sleep deeply).

× I like going to parks now.

✓ I like going to parks now.

This sentence is correct in tense; it expresses a present habit. No correction needed.

× I think it's a good way to come to nature by going to park and the the air is fresh there and we can see my intense and animals.

✓ I think it's a good way to get close to nature by going to parks; the air is fresh there and we can see many plants and animals.

Several issues: 'come to nature' is incorrect; use 'get close to nature' or 'connect with nature'. 'Going to park' needs an article or plural: 'going to parks'. 'the the' is a typographical duplicate. 'my intense' is incorrect; likely 'many plants'. 'animals' is fine. Also plural agreement: 'parks' with 'we can see many plants and animals.' Suggestion: use correct collocations and articles, and correct vocabulary ('plants').

× Would you like to see more parks in your city?

✓ Would you like to see more parks in your city?

This question sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× I'd love to. I think parks play an important role in cities and it decides the. Peace and air in every city, so I'd love to.

✓ I'd love to. I think parks play an important role in cities; they affect the peace and air quality of a city, so I'd love to have more parks.

Problems: 'it decides the. Peace and air' is ungrammatical and fragments the sentence. 'It' is unclear; better to use 'they' referring to parks. 'Decides' is wrong verb choice for 'affect' or 'influence'. 'Peace and air' should be 'peace and air quality' or 'the peacefulness and air quality'. Suggestion: combine clauses, use plural pronoun 'they' for parks, and choose verbs like 'affect' or 'improve'.

× Go to Central Park in New York in the future.

✓ I'd like to go to Central Park in New York in the future.

The original is a fragment lacking a subject and modal or auxiliary to express desire. Use 'I'd like to go' or 'I want to go' to make a complete sentence expressing future intention. Suggestion: include subject and appropriate modal verb.

× I think it's big and beautiful.

✓ I think it's big and beautiful.

This sentence is correct as it expresses a present opinion; no correction needed.

× There are many plans and mouths there, and there's a Big Lake and we can go to nature there.

✓ There are many plants and paths there, and there's a big lake where we can enjoy nature.

Vocabulary errors: 'plans' and 'mouths' are incorrect—likely intended 'plants' and 'paths' or 'places'. 'Big Lake' should not be capitalized unless it is a proper name; 'big lake' is fine. 'We can go to nature there' is awkward; use 'enjoy nature' or 'experience nature'. Suggestion: choose correct nouns and natural collocations (plants, paths, enjoy nature).