Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with relevant details. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors. Use linking words like 'because' or 'and' correctly, and limit your answer to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different landscapes because it helps me appreciate nature. For example, photographing a sunrise over the sea taught me to notice colours and details, and it also improved my composition skills.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and one specific supporting detail. Avoid vague words and unnecessary adjectives. Use a linking phrase like 'because' and finish the thought in one or two sentences.

例: I prefer rural areas because the natural scenery is more peaceful and varied. For instance, I like photographing rolling hills and fields where there are interesting textures and lighting.

提案: Answer directly and give clear, correct examples without hesitation. Correct grammar (e.g., 'my country has diverse landscapes') and avoid broken sentences. Use one link word (e.g., 'for example') and give a concise specific example.

例: I prefer views in my own country because it has very diverse landscapes. For example, within a few hours' drive you can move from dry desert areas to dense rainforests, which gives me many photography opportunities.

× Yes, I love taking pictures of different sceneries because I believe that these kind of activities help me to appreciate the a beautiful, love the nature, beautifulness of the nature and earth itself and it helps me to improve my taking picture skill.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures of different scenery because I believe that these kinds of activities help me to appreciate the beauty of nature and the Earth, and they help me improve my photography skills.

Multiple issues: 'sceneries' is nonstandard; use uncountable 'scenery' (quantifier error). 'these kind of' should be 'these kinds of' or 'this kind of' for agreement (quantifier/number). 'the a beautiful, love the nature, beautifulness of the nature' is ungrammatical word choice and order — replace with 'the beauty of nature'. 'earth' should be capitalized as 'Earth' in this context. 'it helps me to improve my taking picture skill' is awkward: use plural 'skills' and 'improve my photography skills'. Suggestion: simplify and use standard noun forms and plural agreement, and concise phrasing.

× Well, I would say I prefer rural areas because they are more beautiful and breathtaking regarding to their natural beautiness and.

✓ Well, I would say I prefer rural areas because they are more beautiful and breathtaking because of their natural beauty.

Problems: 'regarding to' is incorrect preposition use; correct phrase is 'because of' or 'regarding'. 'beautiness' is nonstandard; use 'beauty' (adjective/noun choice). The sentence ends with an extra 'and.' Suggest using 'because of their natural beauty' to express cause. Also 'more beautiful and breathtaking' is acceptable but avoid redundancy.

× I prefer my own country's sceneries because we our country has a diverse landscapes.

✓ I prefer my own country's scenery because our country has diverse landscapes.

Issues: 'sceneries' is nonstandard; use 'scenery' (uncountable) or 'landscapes'. The phrase 'we our country has' contains redundant pronoun 'we'—remove it. 'a diverse landscapes' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'landscapes'; remove 'a' or use singular 'a diverse landscape'. Suggestion: 'our country has diverse landscapes' is correct.

× For example, we can we have a desert like a after kilometer of a rainforests.

✓ For example, we can have a desert one kilometer after a rainforest.

Multiple structure errors: duplicate 'we' should be removed. 'a desert like a after kilometer of a rainforests' is jumbled; intended meaning seems to be that a desert can appear shortly after a rainforest. Use 'one kilometer after a rainforest' or 'a desert one kilometer away from a rainforest'. Also 'rainforests' plural conflicted with 'a'; choose singular 'a rainforest' or rephrase to plural without 'a'. Ensure clear word order: subject-verb-object and proper quantifier.

× So you know it is always.

✓ So, you know, it is always like that.

This fragment 'So you know it is always.' is incomplete and abrupt. Add a complement to complete the sentence, for example 'like that' or 'this way.' Also add commas for natural speech: 'So, you know, it is always like that.' Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments by finishing the idea.