Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatical, concise and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct tense and articles, avoid repetition and vague phrases.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, photographing a mountain from various angles reveals different textures and lighting, which helps me appreciate its beauty. Also, looking back at those photos reminds me of that place and the mood I felt at the time.

提案: Make grammar accurate and avoid unclear phrases. Keep answer within 2–3 sentences: state preference, give specific reasons with linking words, and finish concisely. Fix subject-verb agreement and awkward expressions like “make environment more humanity.”

例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy modern architecture and minimalist building designs. Moreover, cities usually have good amenities and public transport, which make daily life more convenient and comfortable.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and specific, accurate examples. Correct grammar (articles, plurals, verb forms) and avoid filler repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas and give concrete place names and descriptions correctly.

例: I prefer views in my own country because it has diverse scenery. For example, Kuala Lumpur offers impressive skyscrapers and city lights, while Perak has beautiful beaches and coastal landscapes that I enjoy visiting.

× Yes I like taking picture of different views.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because 'taking pictures of different views' refers to multiple instances. Use plural when talking about general, countable items in this context. Also add a comma after 'Yes'. Suggestion: use 'pictures' for general repeated activity.

× This is because when I taking picture from different views it show me the beautiful from other view and the special from others view that's made me looks.

✓ This is because when I take pictures from different angles, they show me the beauty of other perspectives and the special qualities of those views that appeal to me.

Multiple errors: 'when I taking' requires base verb 'take' after 'when I' (rule: use base form after subject for present simple). 'picture' should be 'pictures' (plural). 'from different views' is awkward; 'from different angles' or 'perspectives' is better (preposition and noun choice). 'it show me' should be 'they show me' to match plural subject 'pictures' (subject-verb agreement). 'the beautiful' should be noun 'the beauty' and 'other view' -> 'other perspectives' (noun forms). 'the special from others view' -> 'the special qualities of those views'. 'that's made me looks' is incorrect tense and reflexive; correct to 'that appeal to me' or 'that make me look' depending on meaning. Suggestion: use present simple 'take' and plural nouns and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× I prefer view in my own country because my my country have a lot of place that have a good views such as Kuala Lumpur have a high guess mineral and at Perak have a beach beach beach.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because my country has many places with good views, such as Kuala Lumpur with tall buildings and Perak, which has beautiful beaches.

Several pluralization and article errors: 'view' should be plural 'views'. 'my my country' is repetition. 'have' should be 'has' to match singular 'country' (subject-verb agreement). 'a lot of place' should be 'many places' (plural). 'have a good views' should be 'with good views' (preposition and plural). 'Kuala Lumpur have' should be 'Kuala Lumpur has' or 'Kuala Lumpur with' and 'a high guess mineral' is unclear; likely intended 'tall skyscrapers' or 'high-rise buildings'—corrected to 'tall buildings'. Repeated 'beach beach beach' simplified to 'beautiful beaches'. Suggestion: use plural nouns for multiple locations and correct verb forms for singular subjects.

× Also, cities offer better amenities and public transport which make daily life more convenient and is make environment more humanity from the start.

✓ Also, cities offer better amenities and public transport, which make daily life more convenient and create a more human-friendly environment from the start.

Problem: 'which make' is correct for plural 'amenities and public transport' but 'is make environment' is ungrammatical. Replaced with 'create a more human-friendly environment' to convey intended meaning. 'more humanity' is incorrect adjective/noun usage; use 'human-friendly' or 'more humane'. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with subjects and use appropriate verb forms ('create') rather than 'is make'.