Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap doğal fakat tekrarlı dolgu ifadeleri ve dilbilgisi hataları var. Daha kısa ve doğrudan bir ana cümle kurun, ardından bir veya iki destekleyici detay ekleyin. Gereksiz "uh" ve tekrarları atın, fiil çekimi ve çoğul kullanıma dikkat edin (ör. "taking pictures" ve "places"). Bağlaçlarla akış sağlayın (for example, because).

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. I often visit new places to capture landscapes and city scenes because taking photos helps me notice small details. For example, last weekend I went to a nearby park and took several shots of the lake at sunset.

提案: Cümlenin yapısı ve kelime seçimi düzeltilmeli; anlamı bozan hatalar var ("it's energy attracts me", "Brits" yerine muhtemelen "bright" veya "bridges"). Konuyu net ifade edin, nedeninizi açıkça belirtin ve bağlaç kullanın. Bir veya iki örnek detay ekleyin ve tekil/çoğul uyumuna dikkat edin.

例: I usually prefer urban views because the city's energy and architecture fascinate me. For example, tall skyscrapers and busy streets create dynamic scenes that are great for photography.

提案: Cümle çok karışık ve anlaşılması güç; dilbilgisi ve kelime sırası üzerinde çalışılmalı. Net bir ana fikir verin (yabancı manzaraları tercih ediyorum), sonra nedenini açık ve mantıklı bir bağlaçla belirtin (because). Somut bir örnek veya kısa açıklama ekleyin. Ayrıca "my country" tekil kullanın ve zaman ifadelerini doğru yerleştirin.

例: I prefer views in other countries because they feel more novel to me; I see the scenery in my own country so often that it becomes familiar. For instance, I enjoyed the coastal views in Portugal last year because they were very different from what I usually see at home.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views. Uh, and this is, uh, my, this is one of the, my best uh, activities. Uh, usually I, I go to uh, different places for, uh, taking picture.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views. This is one of my favorite activities. I usually go to different places to take pictures.

The original contains awkward phrasing and incorrect verb forms. 'My best activities' is unnatural; 'one of my favorite activities' is the natural phrase (adjective use). 'For, taking picture' uses 'for' + gerund incorrectly and omits plural; the correct pattern is 'go to [places] to take pictures'. Suggestion: use 'to' + base verb for purpose and keep noun number consistent (pictures).

× I usually prefer urban areas because it's energy attracts me, especially Brits and skyscrapers seem too good for me. These pictures.

✓ I usually prefer urban areas because the energy there attracts me, especially bright lights and skyscrapers. I think those views are very impressive.

'It's energy attracts me' mixes subject and pronoun incorrectly; use 'the energy there' to refer to urban areas. 'Brits' is incorrect word choice (likely meant 'brights' or 'bright lights'); use correct noun. 'Seem too good for me' is unnatural; use 'are very impressive' or 'appeal to me'. Also 'These pictures.' is a fragment; expand to a full sentence. Suggestion: replace incorrect pronouns and words, and avoid sentence fragments.

× I prefer the views of other countries because in my countries use look me to ordinary by the time because I gradually see them in a lot of time.

✓ I prefer the views of other countries because the views in my country start to look ordinary to me over time, since I see them so often.

The original has multiple pronoun and word-order errors: 'in my countries use look me to ordinary by the time' is ungrammatical. Use 'the views in my country' to specify subject, and 'look ordinary to me' for perception. 'Gradually see them in a lot of time' should be 'over time' or 'so often'. Suggestion: clarify subject, use correct prepositional phrases ('over time', 'so often') and correct word order.