Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and use correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), use correct verb forms and pluralization, and give one or two specific reasons or examples. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different scenes. I often carry my camera when I travel because I like capturing interesting landscapes and candid shots of people, which helps me remember special moments.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and concise supporting details with linking words. Correct vocabulary (habitats, wildlife) and avoid repetition. Provide a short reason and one concrete example of what you like to photograph.

例: I prefer rural areas because they offer richer natural scenery and wildlife. For example, I enjoy photographing trees, wildflowers and animals in their habitats, especially during early morning when animals are most active.

提案: Answer directly and use correct grammar. State preference clearly, give a reason with specific details, and avoid vague phrases. Mention one concrete destination and what makes its views special, using appropriate vocabulary (wildlife, landscapes, photography opportunities).

例: I prefer views in other countries, especially places like Africa, because of its unique wildlife and dramatic landscapes. For instance, I would love to photograph the Serengeti during a migration to capture large herds and their natural behavior.

× Yeah, I would say I, I'm a person who always love to, uh, carry out my camera to takes a lot of picture or potion to many scenes or beep, uh, or sceneries or people. Yeah, it's quite unique I in it and it meaningful for me to.

✓ Yeah, I would say I'm a person who always loves to carry my camera and take a lot of pictures of many scenes, sceneries, or people. Yeah, it's quite unique and meaningful to me.

Multiple issues: subject-verb agreement ('person who always love' should be 'person who always loves'); incorrect verb forms ('carry out my camera' -> 'carry my camera'; 'to takes' -> 'take'); singular/plural noun forms ('a lot of picture' -> 'a lot of pictures'); word order and extra fillers removed for clarity. Suggestion: ensure the verb agrees with the subject (adds -s for third person singular), use base form after 'to' or use gerund consistent structures, and use plural for countable nouns when referring to many items. Grammar Problem Type ID: 27

× Definitely rural areas because rural areas show more the show more the ecosystem, especially plants, the tree and you can see, you can often see the animals. Uh, you can for those habitants when they eat when, when their activities, ya.

✓ Definitely rural areas because they show more of the ecosystem, especially plants and trees, and you can often see animals and their habitats during activities like feeding.

Errors include redundancy ('show more the show more'), incorrect article and preposition use ('show more of the ecosystem'), singular/plural mismatches ('the tree' -> 'trees'; 'habitant' incorrect word, should be 'habitats' or 'inhabitants'); awkward phrasing of activities. Suggestion: remove repetition, use 'show more of' for presenting ecosystems, use plural nouns for general references, and choose the correct noun ('habitats' for places where animals live). Grammar Problem Type ID: 11

× I would say I will recommend other country like I mean for example which is Africa, yeah, because in Africa you can is a more photographer that enthusiasms at there because you can follow more or off about the animals natural and environment.

✓ I would recommend other countries, for example in Africa, because there are more opportunities for photographers there to observe animals in their natural environment.

Mistakes: conflicting modal verbs/tense ('I would say I will recommend' -> use one: 'I would recommend'); article and number errors ('other country' -> 'other countries'); incorrect syntax ('you can is a more photographer that enthusiasms at there'); wrong noun phrases ('animals natural and environment' -> 'animals in their natural environment'). Suggestion: use a single modal expression, pluralize appropriately, and use clear noun phrases like 'opportunities for photographers' and 'natural environment'. Grammar Problem Type ID: 4