Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 用简洁明确的主题句直接回答问题，避免冗长重复。注意句子语法（动词时态、人称和不可数名词）、连贯衔接词的使用，以及发音或搭配错误。可以把观点分为一到两句支持理由，每句提供具体细节或例子。

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different scenes. For example, I often photograph animals at zoos and seaside views because sea photos help me relax when I cannot visit the beach. I also try to capture interesting details like waves or an animal's expression to make the pictures more vivid.

提案: 先直接陈述偏好，然后给出两到三个具体原因，每个原因用连接词衔接并简明。例如注意主谓一致（urban areas is → are），避免冗余表达并用更贴切词汇（e.g. entertainments, public spaces）。句子不宜过长，分成短句更清晰。

例: I prefer urban views because cities offer a variety of activities and vibrant public spaces. For instance, there are many restaurants, cinemas and parks where people socialize. I enjoy photographing busy streets and colorful storefronts since they show everyday life and atmosphere.

提案: 先给出明确答案，然后用具体例子支持。注意词汇搭配（fields不是最好词，用places/attractions）、重复与语法错误（in on my country → in my country）。说明为何喜欢本国的景色时可以提到独特性、便利性或情感联系。句子控制在两到三句内。

例: I prefer views in my own country because there are many unique attractions I enjoy. For example, in Hong Kong I often visit places like Disneyland and Ocean Park where I can photograph cute characters and marine animals. These familiar spots are convenient and bring back good memories, so I like photographing them.

× I like taking pictures in different fields, like maybe sometimes I will take the animals, sometimes I will take the seas.

✓ I like taking pictures in different places. Sometimes I take animals, and sometimes I take pictures of the sea.

句中“taking pictures in different fields”用词不自然，应改为“places”。“I will take the animals”与上下文时态不一致且搭配错误，拍动物应说“take animals”或更清楚地“take pictures of animals”。“take the seas”是不正确的搭配，应为“take pictures of the sea”。建议用现在时表习惯动作。

× As I think watching the seas of the pictures like make me feel very very relaxing.

✓ I think looking at pictures of the sea makes me feel very relaxed.

原句中“the seas of the pictures”结构混乱，应为“pictures of the sea”。“make me feel very very relaxing”中“relaxing”是现在分词，意思是“令人放松的”，但这里要表达“我感到放松”，应使用形容词“relaxed”。主语单数（looking）应使用动词单三形式“makes”。建议注意主语和谓语的一致及形容词/现在分词的区分。

× Although I can't go to the sea, listen the voice, however, looking the picture also make me.

✓ Although I can't go to the sea and hear the sounds, looking at pictures also makes me feel relaxed.

原句结构混乱，使用了两个转折词“Although”和“however”，应使用其中一个。动词搭配错误：“listen the voice”应为“hear the sounds”；“looking the picture”应为“looking at pictures”；“also make me”缺少宾语且动词形式错误，应为“also makes me feel relaxed”。建议简化句子并确保连词、介词与动词搭配正确。

× Yes, I prefer the views in urban areas as urban areas is very beautiful that is so bigger and everyone can be shared in the same areas to doing their things they want to do like eating, watching the films or some taking some picture or some playing the games is feel very relaxing.

✓ Yes, I prefer views in urban areas because urban areas are very beautiful and larger. Everyone can share the same spaces to do what they want, like eating, watching films, taking pictures, or playing games, which feels very relaxing.

原句中“urban areas is”主谓不一致，应为“urban areas are”。“that is so bigger”用法错误，应该用“larger”或“bigger”比较对象也需明确。代词和短语混用（“some taking some picture”）不符合英语表达，应该列举动词不带多余的“some”。最后用从句说明原因时，主句和从句要连接自然，动词形式也要正确。建议理清句子结构，注意主谓一致与动词不定式/动名词的正确使用。

× I prefer the fields in on my country as in my country maybe like in Hong Kong you can look a lot of fields like you can go to the Disneyland or some or some ocean park to look to a different things.

✓ I prefer the countryside in my country. In Hong Kong, you can see many different places, such as Disneyland or Ocean Park, to experience different things.

原句中“fields in on my country”中介词重复且错误，应为“in my country”或“of my country”。“look a lot of fields”应改为“see many places”或“visit many attractions”。“go to the Disneyland”中“the”通常不用于专有名词前，且“some or some ocean park to look to a different things”结构混乱，应改为“such as Disneyland or Ocean Park, to experience different things”。建议注意介词用法和名词前冠词的习惯用法，并使用更自然的动词（see/visit/experience）。

× Like in in Disneyland you can locate some cute character and in ocean park can watch animals.

✓ For example, at Disneyland you can see some cute characters, and at Ocean Park you can watch animals.

原句中重复“in in”，且“locate some cute character”用词不当，应改为“see some cute characters”。“in ocean park can watch animals”缺少主语且冠词、介词使用不当，应为“At Ocean Park you can watch animals”。建议注意介词“at”的使用、可数名词的复数形式及句子主语的完整性。