Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap doğal ve ilgili ancak bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve tekrarlar var. "I like definitely" yerine "I definitely like" daha doğru olur. Ayrıca tek cümlede iki fikir birleşmiş; daha akıcı ve mantıksal bir yapı için kısa bir konu cümlesi ve bir destekleyici cümle kullanın. Bağlaçlar (e.g. because, so) ekleyerek neden fotoğraf çekmeyi sevdiğinizi açıklayın ve spesifik bir örnek verin.

例: I definitely enjoy taking pictures of different views because they capture moments I want to remember. For example, last summer I photographed a sunset over the mountains, and the warm colors and quiet atmosphere made the scene unforgettable.

提案: Cevapta anlatım bozuklukları ve anlamsal belirsizlikler var ("whereas of Tibetan pet" ifadesi anlamlı değil). Ayrıca cümleler kısa ve bağlantısız; neden kırsal alanları tercih ettiğinizi açıkça belirtin ve spesifik detaylar (örneğin hangi tür doğal manzaralar veya hayvanlar) ekleyin. Bağlaçlar kullanarak görüşünüzü pekiştirin.

例: I prefer rural areas because their natural beauty and wildlife inspire me more than city scenes. For instance, I enjoy photographing rolling hills and grazing yaks in Tibetan regions, where the peaceful landscapes and animals create unique compositions.

提案: Cevap mantıklı ama tekrarlamalar ("my my") ve gereksiz atasözü kullanımı akışı zedeliyor. Daha güçlü bir konu cümlesiyle başlayın, sonra nedenlerini mantıklı sıra ile verin ve bir örnekle bitirin. Gereksiz ifadelerden kaçının ve bağlaçlarla düşüncelerinizi bağlayın.

例: I prefer views in my own country because there are many places I haven't discovered yet and each region offers different landscapes. For example, my country has coastal cliffs and highland plateaus that I want to photograph, so I plan to travel more domestically before going abroad.

× I like definitely taking pictures of different views.

✓ I definitely like taking pictures of different views.

The adverb 'definitely' is incorrectly placed after the verb 'like'. In English, adverbs of manner or degree that modify the verb should typically come before the main verb (especially with 'like'). Move 'definitely' before 'like' to form a natural sentence: 'I definitely like taking pictures of different views.'

× When I see breathtaking landscape, I would like to capture unique natural beauty immediately.

✓ When I see a breathtaking landscape, I like to capture its unique natural beauty immediately.

The sentence has article and verb-choice issues: 'landscape' needs an article ('a' for singular countable noun). 'Would like' implies a conditional or polite desire; here a general habitual reaction is intended, so present simple ('like to') is better. Also 'unique natural beauty' is better linked to the landscape with a possessive pronoun ('its'). Use 'a breathtaking landscape' and 'its' to be grammatically correct and natural.

× I like more rural areas whereas of Tibetan pet since natural beauty attracts me more.

✓ I prefer rural areas, especially Tibetan parts, since natural beauty attracts me more.

Multiple errors: 'I like more rural areas' is awkward — use 'I prefer rural areas'. 'Whereas of Tibetan pet' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'especially Tibetan parts' or 'areas in Tibet'. 'Since' is fine to give reason but sentence structure needed reordering. Corrected sentence uses 'prefer', 'especially', and a clear phrase for the Tibetan region.

× I explore their breathtaking scenes and wildlife.

✓ I explore their breathtaking scenery and wildlife.

'Scenes' is possible but collocationally 'scenery' is the correct uncountable noun for landscapes. The pronoun 'their' must clearly refer to 'rural areas' or 'Tibetan parts' — in context it's acceptable, but improving noun choice to 'scenery' makes the sentence more natural.

× I prefer a view in my country because I haven't yet explored everything in my own country.

✓ I prefer views in my country because I haven't yet explored everything here.

'A view' is odd when speaking generally; use plural 'views' or 'seeing views'. Repeating 'my country' twice is redundant; replace second instance with 'here' for natural phrasing. Tense 'haven't yet explored' is fine for present perfect.

× The grass is always greener on the other side.

✓ (Keep as is) The grass is always greener on the other side.

This is an idiomatic sentence and is grammatically correct; no change needed.

× But my my home country also has unique nature and breathtaking views.

✓ But my home country also has unique natural features and breathtaking views.

There is a duplicated word 'my my' — remove the repetition. 'Unique nature' is awkward; use 'unique natural features' or 'unique natural beauty'. The corrected sentence fixes repetition and improves collocation.