Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Shorten and clarify your response, remove fillers (e.g., 'uh'), and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting reasons. Mention one example or detail about what you enjoy about the view to make it more specific. Keep it natural and within 3–4 sentences.

例: Not really. I usually prefer to enjoy a view in the moment rather than take photos because I find it distracting. Besides, my phone camera is low quality, so pictures rarely capture what I actually see. For example, when I visit a quiet lakeside, I like to sit and watch the light on the water instead of taking photos.

提案: Make the answer more grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give two specific reasons linked with appropriate connectors (because, so). Use singular/plural forms correctly and avoid repetition.

例: I prefer views of rural areas because there is less traffic and more open green spaces, which helps me relax. For instance, I enjoy walking along country lanes where I can hear birds and see fields stretching to the horizon.

提案: Make the comparison clearer and avoid vague phrasing. Use present tense consistently, correct articles and count noun usage (e.g., 'a lot of population' -> 'a large population' or 'crowded'). Provide a brief specific example of a foreign scene you like to support your preference.

例: I prefer views in other countries because many places abroad feel less crowded and have more open spaces than my home city. For example, when I visited a coastal town in Portugal, the quiet beaches and wide promenades made me feel calm and refreshed.

× To be honest, uh, not, I am not the person who will go out on vacation and uh, will click pictures.

✓ To be honest, I am not the type of person who goes on vacation and takes pictures.

Original sentence has awkward structure and redundant modal 'will' repeated; 'not' placed oddly. This is a sentence structure and verb form issue (present habitual action). Use 'the type of person who' + present simple 'goes' and 'takes' to express habitual preference. Remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary commas.

× Rather I would prefer enjoying the view which I'm currently seeing and also I do not have a good quality camera or that's even not there in my phone.

✓ Instead, I prefer enjoying the view I am currently seeing, and I do not have a good-quality camera on my phone.

Several problems: 'Rather' used awkwardly; 'which' is unnecessary and relative clause can be reduced; 'that's even not there in my phone' is ungrammatical. This is mainly a pronoun and sentence structure issue. Use 'I prefer enjoying the view I am currently seeing' and say 'I do not have a good-quality camera on my phone.' Hyphenate 'good-quality.'

× I would prefer views of rural areas because there is not many vehicles are there on the roads and there are open spaces and greenery and open landscapes and that makes me feel better and I feel relaxed.

✓ I would prefer views of rural areas because there are not many vehicles on the roads, and there are open spaces, greenery, and open landscapes that make me feel better and relaxed.

Original mixes singular 'is' with plural 'vehicles' and has redundant 'are there.' Use plural verb 'are' with 'many vehicles.' Also streamline list punctuation and use 'that make me feel' (plural subject 'open spaces, greenery') and remove repeated 'and I feel.'

× To be honest, I prefer views in other countries because in my country there was so much of population and the roads are bustling which I do not find in other countries.

✓ To be honest, I prefer views in other countries because in my country there is a large population and the roads are bustling, which I do not find in other countries.

Mixes past tense 'was' with general statement; use present simple 'is' for general facts. Also 'so much of population' is incorrect; use 'a large population' or 'a high population.' Ensure relative clause 'which I do not find in other countries' refers to 'bustling roads.'

× In other countries the open spaces are more and which makes me feel better and relaxed.

✓ In other countries there are more open spaces, which makes me feel better and relaxed.

Original word order 'the open spaces are more' is awkward. Use 'there are more open spaces' to present quantity. Combine clauses with comma and 'which' to show result. Keep tense consistent and concise.'