Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is positive and shows enthusiasm, but it has some grammar errors, redundancy and is slightly long. Make a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and use one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Limit to 2–4 concise sentences.

例: Yes, I do. I'm a big fan of photography, and I often shoot landscapes and buildings to capture their mood. I also try to preserve natural colors in my photos by shooting at golden hour or adjusting white balance carefully.

提案: Your main idea is clear, but the answer contains grammatical mistakes, awkward phrasing and repetition. Use a clear topic sentence, give two specific reasons with linking words, and avoid repeating words. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: I prefer rural areas. Firstly, old houses and traditional buildings often have unique character, which makes for interesting photographs. Secondly, there is less noise and crowds, so I can take my time to compose shots and enjoy the process.

提案: The answer communicates a preference but is confused and contains many errors (word choice, repetition, sentence structure). Start with a clear statement of preference, then give two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repeating words and fix grammar (e.g., "foreign countries" vs "my own country").

例: I prefer views in other countries. I love traveling, and foreign landscapes and historic sites often offer different styles and colors that I haven't seen at home. Also, visiting new places inspires fresh ideas for photo compositions.

× Absolutely yes. I'm a big fan of photography and I tend to take photos from different views to catch the mood of landscape and architecture and also like reflect the real colors in my photographs.

✓ Absolutely yes. I'm a big fan of photography, and I tend to take photos from different viewpoints to catch the mood of landscapes and architecture, and I also like to reflect the real colors in my photographs.

Errors: 'views' used where 'viewpoints' or 'angles' is more natural; 'landscape' and 'architecture' need plural or consistent form; missing 'to' before 'reflect' and missing subject for second verb. Suggestion: use parallel structure with 'and I also like to' and plural nouns when speaking generally. Use commas to separate clauses. Grammar problem type ID:8

× Frankly speaking, I prefer the rural areas because the unique architecture and old houses are a best object that you can take photos and also it there is not any hassle and bustle and compare with the cities and you are called to take photos and enjoy it.

✓ Frankly speaking, I prefer rural areas because their unique architecture and old houses are the best subjects for photography; there is also less hustle and bustle compared with cities, so you can take photos and enjoy it.

Errors: unnecessary definite articles 'the rural areas' and 'the unique architecture'; 'a best object' is incorrect article and noun choice; awkward phrases 'it there is not any hassle and bustle' and 'you are called to take photos'. Suggestion: use 'rural areas' (no 'the'), 'the best subjects', 'less hustle and bustle', and concise clause order for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Prefer using your own counter. I I'm a big fan of traveling and that is why I prefer the sceneries in other foreign countries because I think that in my country I have opportunity to travel and to explore the buildings the the attractions.

✓ I prefer visiting other countries. I'm a big fan of traveling, and that is why I prefer the scenery in foreign countries; in my own country I have fewer opportunities to travel and explore buildings and attractions.

Errors: sentence fragments ('Prefer using your own counter'), repetition ('I I'm'), incorrect noun 'counter' for 'country', awkward noun phrases 'the sceneries in other foreign countries', missing article 'the the', and run-on sentence. Suggestion: make complete sentences, fix typos, use 'scenery' (uncountable) or 'sceneries' rarely, and contrast with 'fewer opportunities'. Grammar problem type ID:26