Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid unclear fragments like “the S about scenery.”

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph coastal sunsets and mountain landscapes because the light and colors change quickly, which makes each photo unique.

提案: Expand your answer slightly with a reason and a brief example using a linking word to make it more natural and informative. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: I prefer views in urban areas because I like the mix of architecture and street life. For instance, I enjoy photographing old buildings next to modern skyscrapers, and the busy streets often provide interesting candid moments.

提案: Make a single coherent sentence as your topic sentence, then support it with a clear reason and an example. Use linking words (for example, because, since) to join ideas and avoid sentence fragments.

例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy discovering landscapes and cultures I haven’t seen before. For example, when I traveled to Japan I photographed traditional temples and rural rice terraces, which felt very different from scenery at home.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, especially the S about scenery.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, especially scenes of scenery.

The original sentence contains 'the S about scenery' which is not a correct use of pronouns or nouns. Likely the speaker meant 'scenes' or 'shots' of scenery. Replace the fragment with a proper noun phrase 'scenes of scenery' (or simply 'scenery') to make the sentence grammatical and clear. Suggestion: use 'scenery' alone ('especially scenery') or 'scenes of scenery' depending on emphasis.

× I prefer views in other countries because. Their views. I have never seen it before.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I have never seen those views before.

The original reply is fragmented and contains pronoun and sentence structure errors: 'because.' ends the clause prematurely and 'Their views.' is a sentence fragment. Also 'it' is used incorrectly to refer to 'views' (plural). Combine fragments into one coherent sentence and use the plural demonstrative pronoun 'those' to match 'views'. This yields a single grammatically correct sentence that fits the context and tense.

× Their views. I have never seen it before.

✓ Those views, I have never seen them before.

Separately, the fragment 'Their views.' is unclear and the pronoun 'it' does not agree in number with 'views'. Use 'those' (demonstrative for plural) and 'them' as the object pronoun to agree in number. Better is to combine into the earlier sentence: 'I have never seen those views before.'