Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it is slightly wordy and could be more natural. Start with a concise topic sentence and add one brief reason or example. Try to avoid vague phrases like "becomes memorable for a person in their later life"; instead, specify what you find memorable (colors, light, mood).

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, I often photograph sunsets and city skylines because the colors and atmosphere help me remember places and moments clearly.

提案: The answer communicates a clear preference but has grammatical errors and some repetition. Use a correct simple sentence to state your preference, then add one specific reason with linking words (e.g., "because", "so"). Avoid generalizations; give a concrete detail about rural scenes you like.

例: I prefer taking photos in rural areas because the landscapes are peaceful and full of natural details, such as rolling hills and streams, which make more attractive pictures than noisy city streets.

提案: Good direct response with a reason, but it's slightly repetitive ("in my country" twice) and could be more specific. State your main point clearly, then give a concrete example and a short personal feeling. Use linking words like "for example" or "because" to connect ideas.

例: I prefer views in my own country because it has diverse landscapes. For example, the mountains here offer quiet hiking trails and panoramic views that help me relax and feel peaceful.

× Yes, I do like to take pictures of different views as it becomes memorable for a person in their later life.

✓ Yes, I like to take pictures of different views because they become memories for a person later in life.

The original mixes present simple and an awkward singular 'it becomes memorable' referring to 'pictures' (plural). Change 'do like' to the simple present 'like' for natural speech, use 'because' for reason, change 'it' to plural 'they' to agree with 'pictures', and use 'become memories' and 'later in life' for natural phrasing.

× I do taking photos in rural areas because the beauty there is quite good.

✓ I take photos in rural areas because the scenery there is very beautiful.

'I do taking' is ungrammatical: after 'do' use the base verb (I do take) or simply use the simple present 'I take'. Also 'beauty there is quite good' is awkward; use 'the scenery there is very beautiful' for correct adjective use and natural expression.

× Then urban areas are city consists of many of cars, horns and many type of pollution which is not quite good for photos.

✓ Urban areas are cities that have many cars, horns, and types of pollution, which are not good for photos.

The original has incorrect sentence structure and noun forms: 'Then urban areas are city consists of' is ungrammatical. Use 'Urban areas are cities that have...' to link subject and relative clause. Change 'many of cars' to 'many cars', 'many type of pollution' to 'types of pollution' (plural), and make the relative clause agree in number: 'which are not good for photos.'

× I prefer views in my country because there are a lot of beautiful places in my country, such as mountains, where a person can really seek peace.

✓ I prefer views in my country because there are many beautiful places, such as mountains, where a person can find peace.

Repeating 'in my country' is redundant; remove repetition. Use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' for formality and concision. 'Can really seek peace' is awkward; 'can find peace' is a more natural present-tense expression. The sentence otherwise correctly uses present tense 'prefer' and 'are'.