Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更直接并减少犹豫语（如“uh”），句子要更简洁连贯，主题句明确说明喜好，然后用具体细节支持（例如拍摄场景、原因或拍摄时的感受）。注意语法（例如“kinda”不当，时态和连词）并避免重复。

例: I don't take many photos of different views; I usually focus on two types: mountains and rivers. I prefer mountains for their dramatic peaks and rivers for their reflective surfaces, which create beautiful compositions. For example, I often photograph a mountain at sunrise when the light outlines the ridges, and a river at dusk when the water mirrors the sky.

提案: 句子时态和用词需准确（过去应使用过去式），避免重复词（如“prefer to prefer”），保持表达简洁。先给出明确答案，再用一两条具体原因和例子支持，使用连接词如“however”或“because”。

例: I used to prefer rural views, but now I prefer urban views because they show technological development and modern architecture. For instance, I enjoy photographing city skylines at night when lights highlight new buildings and public spaces.

提案: 回答要更流畅，避免多余冗长的背景信息。先直接回答问题，然后给出具体原因和例子。用更地道的表达替换“good compound”，例如“blend”或“combination”，并减少重复连接词。

例: I prefer views in the UK because they blend modern architecture with natural landscapes. For example, I like how coastal towns have contemporary promenades beside traditional cliffs, creating interesting contrasts in photos.

× Uh, well, no really.

✓ Um, not really.

这句话结构不完整，口语中常用短语是 "not really" 表示否定而不是 "no really"。建议用更自然的口语表达，如 "Um, not really."。

× For me personally, I usually take pictures of two kinds of views.

✓ For me personally, I usually take pictures of two kinds of views.

原句语法正确，无需更改。此处保留原句。

× Uh, most of the time when kinda is mountain and the other kind is river.

✓ Most of the time one kind is mountains and the other kind is rivers.

原句结构混乱且使用了口语缩写 "kinda"，主语与谓语不匹配。应明确列出两类景色并使用复数形式 "mountains" 和 "rivers"（因为一般指一类景物的多个实例）。建议把句子重构为更清晰的并列结构。

× I just think these two kinds of views are more beautiful and amazing in China.

✓ I just think these two kinds of views are more beautiful and more amazing in China.

原句中使用了两个形容词描述比较级时，最好在每个形容词前加上比较标记 "more" 以保持并列一致性。建议把 "more" 分别用于 "beautiful" 和 "amazing"。

× Actually, in the past I prefer to appreciate the views in rural areas, but nowadays I would like to say I prefer to prefer the views in urban areas because it's just giving me the feelings of the development of technology.

✓ In the past I preferred to appreciate the views in rural areas, but nowadays I prefer the views in urban areas because they make me feel the development of technology.

句中谈过去的喜好应使用过去时（preferred），而不是现在时的 "prefer"。此外，"it's just giving me the feelings of the development of technology" 表达不自然，主语应与复数 "views" 一致，改为 "they make me feel..." 更自然。建议保持时态一致并使用自然表达。

× Well, actually I was born in China and grew up here and, but I actually, I also finished my master's degree in UK.

✓ Well, actually I was born in China and grew up here, but I also finished my master's degree in the UK.

原句中连接词重复（"and, but I actually, I"）造成结构混乱，应简化为 "but I also..."。同时国家名前需要加定冠词 "the UK"。建议去掉多余词语，使用正确的冠词。

× But for me personally, I prefer the views in UK because I think it's a good combination of modern technology and the natural views.

✓ But for me personally, I prefer the views in the UK because I think they're a good combination of modern technology and natural scenery.

国家名前需用定冠词 "the UK"。此外，主语 "the views" 是复数，谓语应为复数形式 "they're"。"the natural views" 更常见的表达是 "natural scenery"。建议保持主谓一致并使用更自然的词汇。

× It's a good compound.

✓ It's a good combination.

"compound" 用法不当，语义不清。此处想表达的是 "结合"，应使用 "combination"。建议使用更准确的名词以匹配前句语境。