Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and unnecessary phrases (e.g., “I I”, “click photos” twice). Use correct plural/singular forms (views) and smoother verbs (take/share/store).

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, when I travel I take photos to preserve memories and later share the best ones with my online friends, while storing the originals on my phone.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence and support it with a specific reason and one brief detail. Use correct grammar (rural areas, clearer) and a linking word such as “because” or “as”.

例: I prefer views in rural areas because the scenery is clearer and less crowded; for instance, open fields and trees create a calmer atmosphere that helps me relax.

提案: Make the response grammatically correct and relevant. Start with a clear statement (I prefer views in my own country), then give one or two specific, coherent reasons using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases (e.g., “open film”, “spaces the nose and portion”) and picky word choice—use ‘open fields’, ‘fresh air’, or ‘familiar landscapes’.

例: I prefer views in my own country because I find the familiar open fields and forests very relaxing; moreover, the fresh air and local scenery remind me of home and reduce stress.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different view because when I travel I love to click photos and make memories and I I like to share my photos with my online friends and capture in my phone.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because when I travel I love to click photos and make memories, and I like to share my photos with my online friends and keep them on my phone.

The phrase 'different view' should be plural 'different views' because 'different' implies more than one item (Grammar Problem Type 1). 'Capture in my phone' is unnatural; use 'keep them on my phone' or 'save them on my phone'. Also removed the duplicated 'I' and added a comma to separate clauses for clarity. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to multiple items and choose appropriate verbs for storing photos (save/keep/store).

× I prefer views in rural area because it simply clear.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they are simply clear.

'Rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' when speaking generally about countryside locations (Grammar Problem Type 1). 'It simply clear' has subject-verb and number mismatch; use 'they are simply clear' to match the plural 'views' (also Subject-verb agreement issue, Grammar Problem Type 27). Suggestion: match singular/plural between subjects and verbs and use correct verb forms (are for plural).

× I prefer you in in own country because for example I enjoy open film and tree which helps me relax and spaces the nose and portion.

✓ I prefer my own country because, for example, I enjoy open fields and trees which help me relax and breathe more easily.

The original 'I prefer you in in own country' misuses the pronoun 'you' instead of 'my' (Grammar Problem Type 12) and has a duplicated 'in'. 'Open film and tree' likely intended 'open fields and trees'; these nouns should be plural to match general reference (also Singular and plural issue). 'Which helps me relax' should be 'which help me relax' because 'fields and trees' is plural (Subject-verb agreement, Grammar Problem Type 27). 'Spaces the nose and portion' is incorrect phrasing; corrected to 'breathe more easily' to convey relaxation and easier breathing. Suggestion: use correct possessive pronouns for ownership (my), fix duplicated words, use plural nouns for general statements, and ensure verb agreement with plural subjects.