Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Mejorar la gramática y la claridad. Evita errores como 'him pictures' y formas verbales incorrectas ('enjoyed to taking'). Usa una oración temática clara seguida de detalles concretos y conecta ideas con palabras de enlace. Por ejemplo, corrige tiempos verbales y pronombres, y limita la respuesta a 3–4 oraciones naturales.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. I work in the Air Force, so I often take pictures while flying; this helps me remember the missions and the scenery when I’m on the ground. I especially like capturing wide landscapes because they show scale and detail.

提案: Hacer la respuesta más directa y corregir repetición y errores gramaticales. Use linking words ('because', 'so', 'therefore') y vocabulario preciso ('quiet', 'open spaces'). Proporcione una razón específica y un breve ejemplo para apoyar su preferencia.

例: I prefer rural views because they offer open spaces and more visible nature. For example, I like seeing fields and forests from above, which feel peaceful and less crowded than city scenes.

提案: Reducir repeticiones y mejorar la precisión léxica. Evita duplicaciones ('to, to', 'you, you') y usa estructuras más naturales como 'I prefer views abroad because...'. Añade una razón concreta y un ejemplo breve para enriquecer la respuesta.

例: I prefer views in other countries because travelling lets me see different landscapes and cultures. For instance, flying over coastal towns in Spain felt refreshing and showed me scenery I don’t see at home.

× Yes I do. I like to take him pictures of different view.

✓ Yes, I do. I like to take pictures of different views.

The student used the incorrect pronoun 'him' before 'pictures' and used the singular 'view' where plural 'views' is needed. Remove 'him' because it is unnecessary and incorrect in this context; use the plural noun 'views' to match 'different' which implies more than one. Suggestion: say 'take pictures of different views.'

× I work in the Air Force and I really enjoyed to taking pictures while I am flying because then when I am in ground I remember what I was doing and that was great.

✓ I work in the Air Force and I really enjoy taking pictures while I am flying because then when I am on the ground I remember what I was doing and it is great.

Multiple tense and form errors: 'really enjoyed' is past tense but context indicates a habitual present, so use 'really enjoy' (present). 'to taking' mixes infinitive and gerund; the verb 'enjoy' must be followed by gerund 'taking'. 'in ground' is incorrect preposition; use 'on the ground'. 'that was great' refers to the general feeling, so use present 'it is great.' Suggestions: keep present tense for habitual actions, use 'enjoy taking', and correct prepositions to 'on the ground.'

× I prefer the views that bring the that you got in the in the rural areas because you got more space to to see the nature and that's really quite.

✓ I prefer the views you get in rural areas because you have more space to see nature and that's really quiet.

Awkward phrasing and extra words: 'the views that bring the that you got in the in the rural areas' contains redundancy and incorrect structure. Use 'the views you get in rural areas.' 'Got' is informal; 'have' is more appropriate. 'to to see the nature' has repetition and unnecessary article 'the' before 'nature.' 'quite' is likely intended as 'quiet' to describe peacefulness. Suggestions: simplify to 'the views you get in rural areas,' use 'have more space,' remove 'the' before 'nature,' and use 'quiet' if meaning peaceful. If intended 'quite' as 'very,' use 'really' or 'very.'

× I prefer the views of another country because I like to, to travel and that's when you, when you are in another travel, you, you enjoy the, the holidays and, and the new places to visit.

✓ I prefer the views of other countries because I like to travel, and when you are in another country you enjoy the holidays and the new places to visit.

Pronoun and noun errors: 'another country' is singular but later refers to 'you are in another travel' which is incorrect—'travel' is not a place; use 'country.' Better to use plural 'other countries' when speaking generally. Remove repeated filler words and duplicate commas. Use 'when you are in another country' and 'you enjoy the holidays and the new places to visit.' Suggestions: avoid repetition, use 'other countries' for general preference, and replace 'travel' with 'country' when referring to location.