Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant and expresses personal feelings, but it has some grammatical errors, repetition and awkward phrasing. To improve: (1) Begin with a clear topic sentence. (2) Use concise supporting details (e.g. what kinds of scenes and why). (3) Avoid redundant phrases and fix grammar (tense consistency, prepositions). (4) Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. I especially like landscapes and street scenes because they help me remember the atmosphere and people I met at that time. For example, a photo of a sunset or a busy market can bring back the colors and emotions I felt, so I often take pictures to preserve those memories.

提案: The response communicates a clear preference, but contains hesitations, unclear word choices and grammar mistakes. To improve: (1) State preference concisely in first sentence. (2) Provide specific reasons with clear vocabulary (e.g. "scenery," "traditional life"). (3) Avoid filler words like "uh" and redundant phrases. (4) Use linking words such as "because" or "as" to connect reason and example.

例: I prefer photographing rural areas because they offer unique scenery and traditional ways of life that I rarely see. For instance, I like capturing farmers working in fields or old village houses, since those scenes feel more authentic and interesting than the familiar urban views.

提案: The answer shows a clear opinion and motivation, but has grammar errors, awkward phrasing and some repetition. To improve: (1) Start with a direct statement of preference. (2) Give concise reasons with correct grammar (avoid "on my country" — use "in my country"). (3) Add a specific example of what you want to see abroad. (4) Keep sentences varied and avoid repeating the same idea.

例: I prefer views in other countries because I want new experiences and different scenery. In my country I see the same landscapes every day, so traveling abroad lets me discover unfamiliar architecture, food markets or natural wonders that broaden my perspective.

× I like capturing pictures of different places, landscapes and views around me.

✓ I like taking pictures of different places, landscapes, and views around me.

Use of 'capturing pictures' is unnatural; 'take pictures' is the standard collocation. Change 'capturing' to the gerund 'taking' which fits the verb + -ing form context and common usage.

× It gives me the ability to remember the feeling that I had by that time.

✓ It helps me remember the feelings I had at that time.

Use present-tense verb 'gives' with 'helps' to express general effect; 'ability to remember' is wordy. 'By that time' is awkward—use 'at that time'. Also pluralize 'feeling' to 'feelings' for naturalness.

× I also liked to remind myself with the people that I've been around me, the colors, the thoughts that were run running around.

✓ I also like to remind myself of the people I've been around, the colors, and the thoughts running through my mind.

Several issues: tense inconsistency ('liked' should be 'like' to match present preference), incorrect preposition 'remind myself with' should be 'remind myself of', redundant 'around me' after 'been around', incorrect verb form 'run running' should be 'running', and 'running around' is vague—'running through my mind' is clearer. Also add commas for clarity.

× To be honest, I live in urban areas and sometimes go to rural areas.

✓ To be honest, I live in an urban area and sometimes go to rural areas.

Use singular 'an urban area' for one person's residence rather than plural 'urban areas'. 'Rural areas' plural is fine for places visited.

× I would actually prefer taking pictures of the rural areas because I don't really go there often much.

✓ I would actually prefer taking pictures of rural areas because I don't go there very often.

Remove unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'rural areas'. The phrase 'often much' is incorrect; use 'very often' or 'not very often'.

× Uh, but some in the rural areas have some very good landscape because of its people and how they live in a very lower level.

✓ But some rural areas have very beautiful landscapes because of their people and how they live at a lower economic level.

Incorrect subject 'some in the rural areas' -> 'some rural areas'. 'Some' repeated is redundant. 'Landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' or 'scenery'; possessive pronoun 'its' should be 'their' to match plural 'areas'. 'In a very lower level' is ungrammatical; use 'at a lower economic level' or 'at a lower socio-economic level'.

× So I like taking pictures of the rural areas.

✓ So I like taking pictures of rural areas.

Remove unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'rural areas' for natural general statement.

× I would definitely prefer views in other countries because on my country your eye gets used to what you actually see each and every day so and I'm someone who likes to explore more and see different places.

✓ I would definitely prefer views in other countries because in my country your eye gets used to what you see every day, and I'm someone who likes to explore and see different places.

Preposition 'on my country' is incorrect; use 'in my country'. Remove redundant 'actually' and 'each and' to streamline. Add comma before 'and' to join clauses. 'Explore more' can be simplified to 'explore'.

× I would prefer views in other countries just to have new experiences and lifestyle.

✓ I would prefer views in other countries just to have new experiences and experience different lifestyles.

'Lifestyle' should be plural 'lifestyles' or phrase 'experience different lifestyles' for clarity. Also parallel structure: 'new experiences and experience different lifestyles' improves clarity; alternatively 'new experiences and a different lifestyle.'