Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện: (1) Ngữ pháp: tránh dùng thì sai (ví dụ 'I did' -> 'I do' hoặc 'I did' chỉ quá khứ); dùng động từ đúng dạng (ví dụ 'love to take' thay vì 'love to taking'). (2) Phát âm & lưu loát: giảm các tiếng

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提案: Cải thiện: (1) Cấu trúc câu: mở đầu trực tiếp với câu chủ đề ngắn gọn (ví dụ 'I prefer urban views.') (2) Từ vựng chính xác: dùng 'landscape' thay vì 'land cap'; dùng 'prefer' not 'referred'. (3) Kết hợp chi tiết hỗ trợ và liên từ (ví dụ 'because' + specific reasons). (4) Giảm ngừng, filler words (uh, um).

例: I prefer urban views because I grew up in a modern city. For example, I enjoy photographing skyscrapers and busy streets since they show energy and contrast, and the city lights create interesting compositions at night.

提案: Cải thiện: (1) Ngữ pháp số ít/ số nhiều và cấu trúc: dùng 'I prefer the views in my own country' hoặc 'I prefer my country's views'. (2) Nội dung cụ thể hơn: đưa lý do rõ ràng (kỷ niệm, văn hóa, familiarity) và ví dụ cụ thể. (3) Tránh lặp từ và filler; dùng ít hơn 5 câu. (4) Sử dụng liên từ để nối ý rõ ràng.

例: I prefer the views in my own country because they remind me of my childhood and cultural traditions. For instance, the coastal scenery near my hometown includes small fishing boats and colorful markets, which always bring back fond memories.

× Uh, yes, I did.

✓ Uh, yes, I do.

The question is about a general preference (present), so present simple 'do' is appropriate; 'did' is past tense and implies a past action. Suggestion: Use present simple for habits or preferences (I do, I like).

× Of course, I love to taking, uh, some, uh, the pictures, uh, from, uh, different link gaps.

✓ Of course, I love taking some pictures from different places.

After 'love' both 'to take' and 'taking' are possible, but 'love taking' is more natural here. 'To taking' is incorrect because you cannot combine 'to' with a gerund. 'link gaps' is unclear; 'places' is appropriate. Suggestion: Use 'love taking' or 'love to take' followed by a clear noun (pictures from different places).

× For example, sometime I, I, I'll, I take picture of the, uh, famous building and, uh, chuckle a beautiful chuckle.

✓ For example, sometimes I take pictures of famous buildings and capture some beautiful scenes.

Use plural 'pictures' when talking generally. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'. 'Take picture' needs an article or plural form. 'The famous building' becomes 'famous buildings' for generality. 'Chuckle a beautiful chuckle' is incorrect and likely intended as 'capture beautiful scenes'. Suggestion: Use 'sometimes' and plural nouns for habitual actions; choose correct verbs like 'capture'.

× But sometime I will take a photo of the bed, the animals.

✓ But sometimes I take photos of birds and animals.

Use 'sometimes' for frequency and present simple 'take' for habitual actions instead of 'will' which suggests future. 'Bed' seems wrong contextually; likely 'birds'. Use plural 'photos'. Suggestion: Use present simple for habits and correct nouns ('birds').

× To be honest, I, uh, referred the, the, the land cap in the urban areas because uh, I, uh, I was born in a city, a modern city.

✓ To be honest, I prefer the landscape in urban areas because I was born in a modern city.

'Referred' is past participle/past form of 'refer' but the intended meaning is 'prefer' (present). Use present simple 'prefer' for current preference. 'Land cap' should be 'landscape'. Suggestion: Use 'prefer' for present preferences and correct noun 'landscape'.

× Umm, so I'm, I, I, I would, I, I'm, I'm glad you to with the city views.

✓ Umm, so I'm glad to be with the city views.

The original contains many disfluencies and incorrect structure. 'Glad you to with' is ungrammatical. Use 'glad to be' or 'happy with' + noun. 'Glad to be with the city views' or better 'I enjoy the city views'. Suggestion: Simplify to 'I'm glad to be surrounded by city views' or 'I enjoy city views'.

× Umm. Uh, yes, umm, I reform the view is my, uh, own countries.

✓ Umm, yes, I prefer the views in my own country.

'Reform' is incorrect; intended word is 'prefer'. Use singular 'country' when referring to one's own nation. 'Views' plural is fine. Use present simple 'prefer' for current preference. Suggestion: Use 'prefer the views in my own country'.

× Umm, I believe that the in other country there are many beautiful view, but uh, I still, but I still love my, uh, own country views because it's, uh, give me a lot of memories.

✓ I believe that in other countries there are many beautiful views, but I still love the views of my own country because they give me a lot of memories.

Word order: 'in other countries' (plural) is correct. 'There are' is needed for existence and must agree with plural 'views'. 'Beautiful view' should be plural 'views'. 'It's give me' is incorrect; 'they give me' agrees with plural 'views'. Suggestion: Use 'There are' with plural nouns, match subject-verb agreement (views -> they give).