Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally natural and shows enthusiasm, but it is repetitive and contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. To improve, make a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., subject-verb agreement, articles) and avoid repeating phrases like "I cannot help myself". Aim for concise, coherent sentences (max 5).

例: I really enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, I often photograph sunsets and garden scenes because the colours and compositions catch my eye, and when I visit restaurants I like to capture the interior design. These pictures help me remember special moments and inspire me when I plan my own decorating ideas.

提案: The answer addresses the question but is repetitive, contains pronunciation/wrong word choices ("infrastructures", "the it's"), and some unclear sentences. Improve by stating your preference clearly, giving two specific reasons with linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"), and avoid contradicting or confusing statements. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "amenities", "landmarks"). Keep sentences grammatically correct and concise.

例: I prefer urban views because cities offer diverse architecture and vibrant public spaces. For example, you can find modern skyscrapers, historic landmarks, and lively plazas, which provide interesting photo opportunities. Additionally, cities have more amenities like cafés and galleries that add character to a scene.

提案: Your idea is clear but the answer is disorganized, repetitive and contains many filler phrases and grammar mistakes. To improve, give a concise topic sentence stating your preference, then support it with specific reasons and an example. Avoid repeating "honestly" and eliminate unfinished fragments. Use comparative structures correctly (e.g., "more beautiful than").

例: I prefer views in other countries because I often see unique landscapes and iconic landmarks in travel videos. For instance, I enjoy watching clips of coastal cliffs and famous city skylines that look very different from scenes at home. These images make me curious to travel and experience those places in person.

× Personally, I enjoy taking pictures of different views, sometimes beautiful scenery is when I step out, sometimes beautiful skies, beautiful gardens and most times when I'm go to restaurants I fall in love with the aesthetics of the place and I cannot help myself.

✓ Personally, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. Sometimes I see beautiful scenery when I step outside, sometimes beautiful skies or gardens. Most of the time when I go to restaurants I fall in love with the aesthetics of the place and cannot help myself.

This sentence contains multiple sentence structure problems (ID 26) and subject-verb errors. It runs several clauses together without proper punctuation and uses incorrect verb form 'go' after 'I'm'. Split into shorter sentences, change 'step out' to 'step outside', and use 'go' instead of 'I'm go' to correct structure and verb form. Also remove the redundant second 'I' in 'and I cannot help myself' for smoother flow.

× But I cannot help myself than to take pictures of this beautiful moment so I can always have something to look back to.

✓ But I cannot help taking pictures of these beautiful moments so I can always have something to look back on.

This sentence misuses 'than to' and the phrase 'help myself than to take' is incorrect (ID 10). Use the correct pattern 'cannot help doing' with the present participle. Also change 'this beautiful moment' to 'these beautiful moments' for agreement and 'look back to' to 'look back on' which is the correct prepositional phrase.

× Urban areas are more developed than rural areas.

✓ Urban areas are more developed than rural areas.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no article change is needed. It is included to indicate no error found and to follow instruction to only correct items matching the provided problem types (ID 22 not applicable).

× We have more interesting buildings, more infrastructures to see here.

✓ We have more interesting buildings and more infrastructure to see here.

The word 'infrastructures' is an incorrect plural countable use; 'infrastructure' is usually an uncountable noun (ID 12). Use 'infrastructure' and connect ideas with 'and' for clarity.

× We have more high end restaurants.

✓ We have more high-end restaurants.

This is a minor issue with adjective formation and compound adjective punctuation (ID 26). Hyphenate 'high-end' when it modifies a noun. The sentence is otherwise fine.

× When you go to the beach, the it's more developed than the rural areas.

✓ When you go to the beach, it is more developed than rural areas.

This sentence has an extra definite article and incorrect pronoun usage ('the it's') causing a sentence structure error (ID 26). Remove the extra 'the' and use 'it is' instead of the contraction 'it's' if clarity is needed. Also 'rural areas' does not need 'the'.

× We have more cinematic places here.

✓ There are more cinematic places here.

Using 'We have' is acceptable, but 'There are' is more natural for describing the presence of places; the original is not strictly wrong. This suggestion improves naturalness and fixes slight sentence structure awkwardness (ID 26).

× A lot of eventful places you can go to down the rural areas.

✓ There are a lot of eventful places you can go to in rural areas.

The phrase 'down the rural areas' is awkward and incorrect (ID 26). Replace with 'in rural areas' and use 'There are' to introduce existence. Remove 'the' before 'rural areas'.

× I honestly prefer views from outside my country.

✓ I honestly prefer views from outside my country.

This sentence is grammatically correct as written and matches the tense; no change required. Included for completeness (ID 1 not applicable).

× Honestly I have seen a lot of clips online. Even though I haven't been outside my country before, I know I have seen a lot of clips online.

✓ Honestly, I have seen a lot of clips online. Even though I have never been outside my country, I know I have seen many clips online.

The repeated clause makes the sentence redundant and awkward. 'Haven't been outside my country before' is acceptable but 'have never been' is more natural. Also use 'many' with countable 'clips' and add commas for clarity (ID 5).

× Beautiful sceneries, beautiful beaches, coastal line you know very beautiful landmarks online.

✓ Beautiful scenery, beautiful beaches, coastlines and very beautiful landmarks online.

'Sceneries' is rarely used; 'scenery' is uncountable (ID 22/11). 'Coastal line' should be 'coastlines' or 'coastline'. Rearrange into a parallel list and use commas for clarity.

× And I can say this countries have got beautiful views than my country.

✓ And I can say that these countries have more beautiful views than my country.

This sentence has several errors: missing demonstrative 'these' before 'countries', incorrect comparative structure 'have got beautiful views than' (should be 'have more beautiful views than'), and missing conjunction 'that' for clarity (ID 27). Fix subject-verb agreement and comparative form.

× How however and I.

✓ (Remove this fragment)

This fragment is incomplete and has no clear meaning or verb, making it a sentence structure error (ID 26 and 23). Remove it or replace with a complete sentence such as 'However, I am not sure.'