Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and fluency: use correct verb forms (e.g., "I like taking"), reduce hesitations and fillers ("uh"), and divide ideas into 2–3 clear sentences. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (where/when you take photos, what memories they trigger). Use one linking phrase (e.g., "because" or "so") to connect ideas.

例: I enjoy taking photos of different views because they bring back fond memories. For example, when I look at pictures from a seaside trip, I remember the weather and activities, which makes me feel happy. Therefore, I often take photos to preserve those moments.

提案: Make your answer more concise and precise: begin with a clear topic sentence stating preference, then give two specific reasons with supporting examples. Avoid repetition ("it is" many times) and vague claims about money; instead mention specific urban features (architecture, landmarks, amenities). Use linking words like "because" and "for example."

例: I prefer views in urban areas because cities offer interesting architecture and famous landmarks. For example, I enjoy photographing old cathedrals and modern skyscrapers, and there are well-maintained parks and viewpoints that make taking pictures easier.

提案: Clarify and organize your response: state preference directly, then support with specific reasons and an example. Reduce hesitations and repetitive phrases. Replace vague statements ("same board") with concrete contrasts (different architecture, languages, cultural scenes). Keep answer to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like "because" and "for instance."

例: I prefer views in other countries because they show different cultures and landscapes. For instance, photographing markets in Japan or colorful buildings in Portugal gives me new perspectives and memories that I don't get at home.

× Yes, I really do liking taking pictures of different, uh, views because it actually gives me nostalgia when I look at afterwards and I feel really, uh, good that time because I remember all of the happy moments which I spent there, what all things I did. So I really like to take it from memories and for just to make make me feel better.

✓ Yes, I really do like taking pictures of different views because they give me nostalgia when I look at them afterwards and I feel really good then, because I remember all of the happy moments I spent there and all the things I did. So I really like to take them to keep the memories and to make myself feel better.

The main error is incorrect use of the verb + -ing after the emphatic 'do'; 'do liking' should be 'do like' (Grammar Problem Type ID 8). Also pronoun and noun reference problems: 'it' referring to 'pictures' should be plural 'they' and 'look at afterwards' needs object 'them'. 'That time' should be 'then' for time reference. Repetitions and awkward phrasing 'what all things I did' corrected to 'all the things I did'. Suggestions: after 'do' use base verb form, ensure pronouns agree in number with nouns, and simplify sentences for clarity. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 8)

× I really do prefer views in urban areas more because it is very developed and it is it has more sightseeing it because it is clean, it is well maintained and it is a very hygienic because urban areas have that money to clean the things and keep it nicely. So yes, I think I'll prefer more urban areas.

✓ I prefer urban views because they are more developed and have more sightseeing opportunities; they are cleaner, better maintained and more hygienic because urban areas have the resources to keep things tidy. So yes, I think I prefer urban areas.

Errors include article misuse and unnatural phrasing (Grammar Problem Type ID 22). 'It is very developed' is better as 'they are more developed' to match plural 'views'. 'A very hygienic' incorrect article and adjective use; 'more hygienic' is appropriate. 'That money' should be 'the resources' or 'the money' and 'clean the things' should be 'keep things clean'. Suggestions: match plurality between subject and verb, avoid unnecessary articles before adjectives, and use precise nouns like 'resources'. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 22)

× I really do prefer views in different countries because you are very, uh, uh, common with the views in your country Because whenever you, wherever you go, you will see the same thing, like same board, same shop, same restaurant, same food. But you will really like to go in different countries and see views that the culture there, how they live, the cities. And also, I really do prefer views in different countries. That's why we go for.

✓ I prefer views in different countries because you become very familiar with the views in your own country. Wherever you go there you will see the same things: the same signs, shops, restaurants and food. But you really want to visit other countries to see the different culture, how people live, and the cities. Also, I prefer views in different countries; that is why we travel abroad.

Multiple pronoun and cohesion issues (Grammar Problem Type ID 12). 'You are very common with' is incorrect; 'become familiar with' or 'used to' is correct. 'Same board' should be 'same signs' and plural agreement 'same things'. 'See views that the culture there' is ungrammatical; it should express purpose: 'see the different culture, how they live'. Final fragment 'That's why we go for' is incomplete; corrected to 'that is why we travel abroad'. Suggestions: use appropriate verbs with pronouns ('become familiar with'), ensure parallelism and complete clauses, and replace vague pronouns with clear nouns. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 12)