Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 答えは明確で話題を示していますが、言い淀み（um, uh）、繰り返し（gold, gold）、語順や語法の不自然さが目立ちます。改善のためには、短く流暢な主題文を述べ、その後に季節や場所、具体的な理由を1〜2文でつなげる練習をしてください。接続詞（for example, because, so）を意図的に使い、語彙の反復を避けて表現を豊かにしましょう。

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures, especially of nature. For example, every autumn I go to the mountains to photograph the leaves because they turn brilliant shades of red and gold, which makes the scenery very photogenic.

提案: 応答は直接的で内容も分かりやすいですが、流暢さに欠け、単語の単純な並列（flower, mountains and the river）や不自然な語順があります。改善には、トピック文→理由→具体例の構成を意識し、接続語（because, for instance）を使って論理的に繋げてください。また複数形や冠詞の使い方（flowers, the river → rivers）に注意しましょう。

例: I prefer rural views because they are rich in natural scenery. For instance, I enjoy fields of wildflowers, rolling mountains and clear rivers, which feel peaceful compared with busy city streets.

提案: 回答の意図は伝わりますが、語彙や文法が不正確で不自然な表現（"fills me strange", "the view of the overseas", 文が途切れる）があり、具体例も欠けています。改善には、ネイティブが使う自然な表現（"it feels strange in a good way" → "it feels refreshingly different"等）を練習し、理由と具体的な例（建築様式、街並みなど）を構成して述べる練習をしてください。

例: I prefer views in other countries because they often feel refreshingly different. For example, seeing traditional architecture and unfamiliar streets helps me understand local culture and gives me new photographic ideas.

× Yes, I like taking pictures, especially I like to take pictures of nature.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures; especially, I like taking pictures of nature.

The sentence mixes two parallel expressions 'like taking' and 'like to take.' While both are possible, maintaining parallel structure improves clarity. Use 'taking' consistently for parallelism and add punctuation for flow. Suggestion: keep gerund form for repeated preference and add a semicolon or conjunction to connect clauses.

× So like in full, uh, in autumn season, I go to the mountain to take the picture of leaves because the leaves change their color to gold, gold or red in autumn.

✓ In autumn, I go to the mountains to take pictures of the leaves because they change color to gold or red.

Several issues: 'in autumn season' is redundant; use 'in autumn.' 'Go to the mountain' should be plural 'go to the mountains' for typical expression. 'Take the picture of leaves' should be plural 'take pictures of the leaves.' 'The leaves change their color to gold, gold or red' is repetitive and awkward; use 'they change color to gold or red.' Maintain simple present for habitual action. Suggestion: simplify phrases and use plural nouns where appropriate.

× I prefer rural areas view because umm the view of rural area is full of nature.

✓ I prefer views of rural areas because the countryside is full of nature.

'Rural areas view' is ungrammatical; use 'views of rural areas.' 'The view of rural area' lacks articles and number; better to say 'the countryside' or 'rural areas.' This fixes quantifier/article and noun form usage. Suggestion: use established nouns like 'countryside' and pluralize 'views.'

× I really like nature such as flower, mountains and the river.

✓ I really like nature, such as flowers, mountains, and rivers.

List items need correct plural forms: 'flower' should be 'flowers' and 'the river' should be 'rivers' to match general preference. Also add commas in the list. Suggestion: use plural nouns when speaking generally about categories.

× Oh, I like the view of other countries because it fills me strange in the good way.

✓ Oh, I like the views of other countries because they make me feel strangely in a good way.

Original uses 'fills me strange' which is incorrect; the verb 'make' + object + complement is natural: 'they make me feel...' 'In the good way' should be 'in a good way' or 'positively.' 'View' -> 'views' for plural. Suggestion: use 'make me feel' plus appropriate adverb or adjective.

× I can feel the culture by watching the view of the overseas and the I like to watch the building of.

✓ I can sense the culture by viewing overseas scenes, and I also like looking at the buildings.

Fragmented and ungrammatical: 'watching the view of the overseas' is awkward; use 'viewing overseas scenes' or 'looking at scenes abroad.' 'The I like to watch the building of' is a broken clause; revise to 'and I also like looking at the buildings.' Use conjunctions to connect ideas and correct noun forms. Suggestion: restructure sentence for clarity and correct verb+noun collocations.