Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сформулируйте ответ более естественно и грамматически правильно: дайте короткое утверждение по теме, затем одно-два уточняющих предложения с конкретикой. Избегайте ошибок в словосочетаниях (например, «hobby is photographer» и порядок слов в предложении «A lot of pictures are I with my friends»). Также постарайтесь не превышать 3–4 предложений и использовать связку для плавности.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. Photography is my hobby, so I often take photos when I go out with friends. For example, I like capturing city skylines and park scenes, and many of my photos include my friends enjoying the moment.

提案: Исправьте лексические и грамматические ошибки и используйте связку для объяснения причины: замените «reviews» на «views», проверьте согласование и артикли («a more calm place» → «a calmer place»). Дайте конкретные детали, какие элементы деревни вам нравятся (пейзажи, тишина) и свяжите их логически.

例: I prefer views in rural areas because I find them calmer and more relaxing. The quiet countryside, open fields and natural scenery help me unwind, so I often choose rural spots for leisurely walks and photos.

提案: Упростите и структурируйте ответ: начните с краткого утверждения, затем приведите конкретную причину и пример. Исправьте грамматику и порядок слов (например, «other countries more colorful» → «other countries are more colorful»; «it's I'm stress» → «I feel stressed»). Избегайте повторов и сделайте фразу более естественной.

例: I prefer views in other countries because they often seem more colorful and interesting to me. For instance, when I travel abroad I enjoy different architecture and vibrant street life, which helps me relax, whereas familiar places at home sometimes make me feel stressed.

× My hobby is photographer, so when I hang out with my friends I always take pictures.

✓ My hobby is photography, so when I hang out with my friends I always take pictures.

The noun 'photographer' names a person, while 'hobby' requires an activity or thing: 'photography'. Use the noun form that denotes the activity. Suggestion: use 'photography' for the hobby and 'photographer' to say 'I am a photographer'. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× A lot of pictures are I with my friends.

✓ A lot of the pictures are of me with my friends.

The structure 'pictures are I with my friends' is incorrect. Use the preposition 'of' to show relationship (pictures of me), and use the object pronoun 'me' not 'I'. Also include 'the' or omit depending on context. Suggestion: 'A lot of the pictures are of me and my friends.' Grammar problem type ID: 12

× I prefer reviews in rural areas because it's more comfortable for me.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they're more comfortable for me.

The student used 'reviews' (assessment) instead of 'views' (scenery). Also 'views' is plural, so use 'they're' or 'are' not 'it's'. Use plural adjective agreement: 'more comfortable' is fine; 'for me' is fine. Suggestion: 'I prefer views in rural areas because they are more comfortable for me.' Grammar problem type ID: 1

× There are no people so it's more calm place and I can relax there.

✓ There are no people, so it's a calmer place and I can relax there.

Missing article 'a' before 'calmer place' and comparative adjective should be 'calmer' not 'more calm' in this context. Also add a comma before 'so'. Suggestion: use 'a calmer place' or 'more peaceful' for smoother phrasing. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× I prefer views in other countries because in my opinion other countries more colorful and more comfortable for me because when I walk in around in my country it's I'm stress and in another country I am relaxed.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because, in my opinion, other countries are more colorful and more comfortable for me; when I walk around in my country I feel stressed, but in another country I feel relaxed.

Multiple issues: missing verb 'are' after 'other countries' (subject-verb agreement), incorrect word order 'walk in around' should be 'walk around', incorrect adjective/adverb 'it's I'm stress' should be 'I feel stressed', and inconsistent sentence structure—use conjunctions and proper punctuation. Also 'feel' is better than 'be' for temporary states. Suggestion: split into clearer clauses, include 'are' for plural subjects, use 'walk around', and 'feel stressed/relaxed'. Grammar problem type ID: 27}]} PMID: None.UFACTURER: None. }