Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更直接并注意语法与连贯性。可以用1句主题句表明喜欢拍照，然后用一到两句具体细节支持说明原因，避免重复词汇并修正语法（如natural scene -> natural scenery; bring me the peace -> bring me peace）。同时避免无意义填充词（如Yeah）。

例: Yes, I love taking pictures, especially of natural scenery. When I find a beautiful scene, it helps me relax and clear my mind because I enjoy focusing on colours and composition. I also collect photographs to remember places I've visited.

提案: 回答应更自然、语法更准确并使用连接词使逻辑清晰。将“bored about the city”改为“bored with city life”，并把“get more close to the natural”改为“be closer to nature”。可补充一两个具体理由或例子以丰富回答。

例: I prefer rural areas because I'm used to city life and often find it noisy and crowded. In the countryside I can enjoy quieter landscapes, fresh air and wide open spaces, which makes taking photos much more enjoyable.

提案: 回答需要更准确和流畅。语法应改为“I prefer views in other countries”并解释原因，避免不完整的短语如“Travel through my country”。可以结合具体比较或个人经历来支撑观点。

例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy discovering different cultures and landscapes. For instance, photographing coastal villages in another country often gives me fresh perspectives compared with scenes I see at home.

× Of course, especially the natural scene.

✓ Of course, especially natural scenes.

原句中使用了定冠词“the”使短语听起来指特定场景，但说话者想表达的是一般喜好，且“scene”应为复数以匹配泛指的“different views”。建议将“the natural scene”改为“natural scenes”来表示对自然景色的普遍喜爱。

× Every time I look for a beautiful scene, it will bring me the peace in my mind.

✓ Every time I look for a beautiful scene, it brings me peace of mind.

原句中时态和主谓一致问题：从句以一般现在时描述习惯动作，主句不应用“will”表将来。并且“the peace in my mind”用法不自然，应改为习语“peace of mind”。建议用一般现在时“brings”并改为“peace of mind”。

× And I really love photographs. Yeah.

✓ And I really love photographs.

句子本身语法上并无大错，但口语中最后的“Yes/Yeah”可作为语气词，与前句并列用逗号或单独一句均可。此处删除多余“Yeah”能使书面表达更简洁。

× I prefer rural areas, maybe because I live in a city so I'm bored about the city and I just want to get more close to the natural.

✓ I prefer rural areas, maybe because I live in a city and I'm bored with it, so I just want to get closer to nature.

原句中存在多处结构问题：1) “bored about the city”搭配错误，正确搭配是“bored with (something)”；2) “get more close”顺序错误，应为“get closer”或“become closer”且不用“more”与“closer”同时使用；3) “to the natural”用法不对，应为“to nature”。建议使用连贯的连接词，调整词序和介词搭配。

× I prefer the views in other countries. Travel through my country and I'm just curious about the different views.

✓ I prefer the views in other countries. When I travel around my own country, I'm curious about how the scenery differs.

原句中“Travel through my country”为不完整的句子（缺主语或连词），并且时态和表达不够自然。应使用完整句子并用一般现在时或现在进行表达习惯或常态，加上连词“when”并改写为自然搭配“travel around my own country”以及表达“想知道风景有何不同”更地道。