Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and add a specific example or reason to make the answer more vivid. Avoid repeating similar ideas (both sentences say the world is beautiful). Use a linking word to connect the main idea and the supporting detail.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different sceneries because they reveal contrasting kinds of beauty. For example, I recently captured a sunrise over the sea and a misty mountain—these photos help me remember places and the moods they create.

提案: Clarify your preference (urban or rural) — the answer is confusing. State your choice clearly, then give a specific reason and an example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for instance' to improve coherence.

例: I prefer urban areas because I enjoy admiring architecture. For instance, when I visit cities I like to study historic buildings and modern skyscrapers, which reflect the local culture and history.

提案: This answer is fairly clear but could be improved with a stronger topic sentence and a concrete example. Mention a specific country or landscape to make your preference more convincing and use a linking word like 'because' or 'for example'.

例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer new landscapes and architectural styles. For example, I loved seeing the tiled roofs and narrow alleys in Portugal, which were very different from the scenery at home.

× Yes, I love to take pictures of different sceneries because it shows the different contrasts of beauty that this world holds.

✓ Yes, I love to take pictures of different scenes because they show the various contrasts of beauty that this world holds.

The noun 'scenery' is uncountable in English and should not be pluralized as 'sceneries' (related to Grammar Problem Type 1: Singular and plural issue). Also, the verb 'shows' disagrees with the plural subject; changing 'it shows' to 'they show' matches the plural 'scenes' (Grammar Problem Type 27: Subject-verb agreement errors). 'Different contrasts' is redundant; 'various contrasts' or simply 'contrasts' is clearer. Suggestion: use 'scenes' for multiple individual views and ensure subject and verb agree.

× Well, I prefer urban areas and rural because I love to admire different architectures in other countries since they hold different cultures and beliefs.

✓ Well, I prefer urban and rural areas because I love to admire different types of architecture in other countries, since they reflect different cultures and beliefs.

The phrase 'urban areas and rural' mixes forms; 'urban and rural areas' is correct (Grammar Problem Type 26: Sentence structure errors). 'Architectures' is incorrect as a plural count noun; use 'types of architecture' or 'architecture' (Grammar Problem Type 1: Singular and plural issue). 'They hold different cultures' is awkward; buildings or architecture do not 'hold' cultures as directly as 'reflect' does (word choice). Suggestion: reorder to 'urban and rural areas', use 'architecture' or 'types of architecture', and use 'reflect' for clearer meaning.

× I slightly prefer other countries than my own since I am more accustomed to my home than the rest of the world.

✓ I slightly prefer other countries to my own, since I am more accustomed to my home than to the rest of the world.

When comparing preferences, English uses 'prefer A to B', not 'prefer A than B' (Grammar Problem Type 26: Sentence structure errors and Grammar Problem Type 6: Present tense issue in comparative construction). Also, when using 'more accustomed', the structure typically compares 'to X' with 'to Y'; add the missing preposition 'to' before 'the rest of the world' (Grammar Problem Type 11: Incorrect use of prepositions). Suggestion: use 'prefer ... to ...' and include 'to' after 'than' in the comparison of 'accustomed'.

× That's why when I travel, I love to admire the different varieties of landscapes and architecture.

✓ That's why, when I travel, I love to admire the various landscapes and architecture.

'Different varieties of landscapes' is wordy and slightly awkward; 'various landscapes' is more natural (Grammar Problem Type 13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). 'Architecture' as an uncountable noun does not need 'varieties of' before it. Also the comma placement after 'That's why' improves readability (Grammar Problem Type 26: Sentence structure errors). Suggestion: simplify to 'various landscapes and architecture' to be concise and natural.