Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, reduce fillers (uh), correct grammar (plural forms: pictures), and give one or two specific examples with brief reasons. Keep answer under 5 sentences and use linking words for coherence.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph beaches for their wide open skies and my friends because they capture candid moments. I find photography relaxing and it helps me preserve memories.

提案: Answer directly with a clear preference, avoid repetitions and fillers, and give specific reasons and examples. Use linking words (because, so) correctly and correct grammar (take pictures of rural/countryside views). Keep response concise.

例: I prefer rural views, especially countryside scenery, because it feels relaxing and visually striking. For instance, I enjoy photographing rolling hills and farms at sunset because the light and colors are very peaceful, which helps me relax.

提案: Clarify your meaning and remove odd phrases ('sweet', 'do in your research'). State a clear preference and give specific reasons and examples. Use correct verb forms (visit new countries, take pictures of new cultures/traditions). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and avoid fillers.

例: I prefer taking photos in other countries because I can capture different cultures and traditions that I haven't seen before. For example, I photographed a traditional festival last year and loved how the costumes and colors were completely different from what I see at home.

× Yes, I like, uh, taking picture of different views, uh, certainly, uh, the beach or the, or the picture of my friends. So, uh, I like to take, uh, picture, uh, to all.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, such as the beach or pictures of my friends. So, I like to take pictures of everything.

The student repeatedly used the singular 'picture' when referring to multiple images; this is a singular and plural issue. Use the plural 'pictures' when talking about more than one photo. Also simplified and removed filler words. Suggestion: when referring to multiple items, use plural forms (picture -> pictures) and use 'of' for relationships (pictures of my friends).

× I like uh. OK, I like, uh, take picture for uh, uh, real views in the countryside 'cause it is uh, relaxing and uh, impressive. So, uh, you can take a break or take pictures, you can, uh, relaxing your mind.

✓ I like to take pictures of real views in the countryside because it is relaxing and impressive. You can take a break or take pictures to relax your mind.

The original mixes base verb forms and -ing forms incorrectly. After 'I like' both 'to take' and 'taking' are possible; here 'to take' is chosen to fit style. Use 'take pictures of' not 'take picture for'. Use 'relaxing' as an adjective or use infinitive 'to relax' for purpose. Suggestion: use correct verb forms and prepositions: 'take pictures of', 'because it is relaxing', 'to relax your mind'.

× To be honest, sweet, I like to visit the new country and take a picture to a new culture or a new tradition because, uh, I know my country. So I like to do in your research or uh, and uh, uh, travel.

✓ To be honest, I like to visit new countries and take pictures of new cultures and traditions because I already know my country. So I like to travel and learn about them.

There are multiple incorrect prepositions: 'visit the new country' should be 'visit new countries' (number and article), and 'take a picture to a new culture' should be 'take pictures of new cultures'. 'Do in your research' is unclear; likely meant 'learn about them' or 'do research'. Suggestion: use 'visit new countries', 'take pictures of', and express purpose with 'learn about' or 'travel and learn'.

× I like to take a picture to a new culture or a new tradition because, uh, I know my country.

✓ I like to take pictures of new cultures or new traditions because I know my country.

Singular/plural mismatch and wrong preposition 'to' used with 'take a picture'; use plural 'pictures' and preposition 'of' when describing what the photos depict. Also match plurality across 'cultures' and 'traditions'. Suggestion: use 'pictures of' and plural nouns when speaking generally.