Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời cần tự nhiên và chính xác về ngữ pháp; tránh dùng từ không phù hợp (ví dụ: “sharp”, “magnetic magnificent” không đúng ngữ cảnh). Cần trả lời trực tiếp bằng câu chủ đề, sau đó bổ sung 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể. Sử dụng thì động từ đúng (ví dụ: ‘I took’) và tránh tiếng ậm ừ. Nên dùng từ vựng phù hợp như “capture/photograph scenic views”, nêu thời gian, địa điểm và cảm xúc ngắn gọn.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of scenic views. For example, last summer I visited Ha Long Bay and I took many photos of the limestone islands at sunrise, which looked stunning and peaceful.

提案: Cần sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và chọn từ chính xác (ví dụ: “I prefer rural areas” thay vì “I refer local areas”). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó nêu lý do cụ thể với liên từ (because, as, so). Bổ sung một ví dụ ngắn hoặc mô tả chi tiết để cụ thể hóa lý do (ví dụ: không khí trong lành, cảnh đồng lúa, thiên nhiên).

例: I prefer rural areas because they have more green spaces and cleaner air. For instance, when I visit the countryside I enjoy walking among rice fields and listening to birds, which makes me feel relaxed.

提案: Câu trả lời cần hoàn chỉnh và rành mạch; sửa ngữ pháp và cấu trúc so sánh (ví dụ: “cheaper than abroad/traveling abroad”). Nên đưa ra câu chủ đề rõ ràng (“It depends on my purpose”), giải thích ngắn gọn với lí do cụ thể và kết thúc bằng ví dụ hoặc thói quen để tăng tính thuyết phục. Tránh câu chưa hoàn thiện.

例: It depends on my purpose. If I’m on a tight budget, I prefer visiting places in my own country because domestic travel is usually much cheaper than going abroad. However, if I want a new cultural experience, I would choose to travel to another country.

× Yes, I like capturing pictures whenever I sharp a magnetic magnificent views.

✓ Yes, I like capturing pictures whenever I see magnificent views.

Errors: 'sharp' is incorrect verb choice; 'magnetic' is wrong adjective for 'magnificent'; 'views' is plural but article/wording awkward. Use 'see' to express perceiving a view and 'magnificent' as the correct descriptive adjective. Also remove 'a' before plural 'views'. Suggestion: use simple verbs like 'see' or 'come across' and place adjectives before nouns: 'magnificent views'.

× For example, umm, last summer when I had chance to go to Halong Bay, I take a picture.

✓ For example, umm, last summer when I had the chance to go to Halong Bay, I took a picture.

Errors: tense mismatch and missing article. The time marker 'last summer' requires past tense 'took' not present 'take'. Also include the definite article 'the' in 'the chance'. Suggestion: match verbs to the time reference and include articles: 'the chance' and use past simple for completed past events.

× Personally I refer local areas because they are have their own beauty with a lot of greener spaces.

✓ Personally I prefer local areas because they have their own beauty with a lot of green spaces.

Errors: 'refer' is wrong verb; should be 'prefer'. 'are have' is ungrammatical; use 'have' with plural subject. 'greener' is comparative and inappropriate; use 'green' to describe spaces. Suggestion: choose correct verbs (prefer) and ensure subject-verb agreement; use appropriate adjective form.

× Therefore I can feel fresher in this area.

✓ Therefore I feel fresher in these areas.

Errors: 'can feel fresher' is acceptable but 'feel fresher' is more natural; 'this area' conflicts with plural reference 'local areas' earlier—use 'these areas' or 'this area' consistently. Suggestion: maintain consistency in number and prefer simpler present tense 'I feel fresher'.

× It depends on what the purpose.

✓ It depends on the purpose.

Errors: awkward phrasing 'depends on what the purpose'—use 'depends on the purpose' or 'depends on what the purpose is'. Suggestion: use a complete clause 'depends on what the purpose is' or the noun phrase 'depends on the purpose'.

× When I don't have a lot of money, I prefer my own country rather than other countries because the travel fees is cheaper than the.

✓ When I don't have a lot of money, I prefer my own country to other countries because the travel fees are cheaper.

Errors: comparison structure and verb agreement. Use 'prefer A to B' rather than 'prefer A rather than B'. 'travel fees' is plural so verb must be 'are' not 'is'. The sentence ended with 'than the.' which is incomplete—either compare 'are cheaper' or 'are cheaper than those in other countries'. Suggestion: use correct comparison form 'prefer A to B', ensure plural subjects take plural verbs, and complete comparisons fully.