Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cấu trúc câu ban đầu tốt nhưng câu trả lời hơi dài dòng và thiếu từ vựng phong phú. Hãy rút gọn câu chủ đề, dùng liên từ để tạo mạch lạc và thêm chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: loại cây, thời gian chụp, mục đích sử dụng ảnh). Tránh lặp từ (ví dụ: “taking pictures” và “photograph” cùng ý).

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. I usually focus on green spaces and mature trees, especially at golden hour, because the light makes textures pop. I also take selfies at unique sites so I can share memories with family later.

提案: Ý tưởng rõ ràng nhưng ngôn ngữ cần chính xác và phong phú hơn. Sửa lỗi số ít/ số nhiều (“view” → “views”), sử dụng liên từ để kết nối lý do và thêm một so sánh ngắn với thành phố để làm câu trả lời cụ thể hơn.

例: I prefer rural views because my hometown is full of peaceful countryside, many trees and open fields. Compared with cities, it feels quieter and less crowded, so we can play football and enjoy outdoor activities more easily.

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu mạch lạc và có lỗi ngữ pháp/ cấu trúc (thừa từ, thiếu danh từ: “destination” → “destinations”; lặp “there there”). Nên mở đầu trực tiếp, nêu lý do cụ thể (kiến trúc, văn hóa, cảnh quan khác biệt) và đưa ví dụ ngắn cho từng nước đã đề cập.

例: I prefer views in other countries because the landscapes and architecture are quite different from home. For example, Singapore’s modern skyline, Japan’s historic shrines and Thailand’s tropical beaches each offer unique photo opportunities.

× I prefer view in rural areas because I like the countryside and my hometown is an example.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I like the countryside and my hometown is an example.

The noun 'view' should be plural 'views' to match 'rural areas' and the general sense of preferring views in those areas. Use plural for countable nouns when speaking generally about multiple instances.'

× It's very peaceful, quiet and a lot of trees.

✓ It's very peaceful and quiet, and there are a lot of trees.

The original sentence lacks a proper verb and coordination: 'a lot of trees' needs the verb 'there are' to be grammatical. Also add a comma before conjunction for clarity. Use 'there are' to state existence of plural nouns.'

× We can play football and participate in many outdoor activities.

✓ We can play football and participate in many outdoor activities.

This sentence is already correct. 'Can' is a modal verb followed by the base form 'play' and 'participate', which is correct. No change is needed.'

× Honestly, I think that I prefer views in other countries because I traveled to Singapore, Thailand, China, Japan and Korea and I think there there are many beautiful destination in.

✓ Honestly, I think I prefer views in other countries because I have traveled to Singapore, Thailand, China, Japan, and Korea, and I think there are many beautiful destinations there.

Use present perfect 'have traveled' to link past experiences to the present preference. Remove the repeated 'I think'. Place 'there' correctly at the end and use plural 'destinations' for countable noun. Also include commas in the list and use 'there are' before plural noun.'

× ...and I think there there are many beautiful destination in.

✓ ...and I think there are many beautiful destinations there.

The preposition 'in' at the end is misplaced; English prefers 'there' after the noun phrase for location in this structure. Also 'destination' should be plural 'destinations'. Remove duplicate 'there'.' }]}.jboss_failure_detected:0}