Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện rõ ràng và ngắn gọn câu chủ đề, tránh lặp từ và tiếng ồn (um/uh). Nên dùng cấu trúc trực tiếp: nêu quan điểm rồi giải thích với một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể. Chú ý ngữ pháp (I hardly take photos / If I see a nice view, I will take a photo).

例: I don’t usually take many photos because I prefer enjoying the moment. However, if I see a really beautiful view, I will take a single photo to remember it.

提案: Trả lời trực tiếp hơn bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (I prefer... because...). Tránh cấu trúc lung tung và lỗi sở hữu (own their). Thêm liên kết logic như “however” hoặc “because” và một ví dụ cụ thể về cái bạn thích chụp.

例: I prefer rural views because they are quieter and more natural. For example, I enjoy photographing open fields and rivers rather than busy city streets.

提案: Nên nói rõ và chính xác: dùng cụm từ đúng (air pollution), tránh lặp và tiếng ồn. Bổ sung lý do cụ thể hơn và một so sánh ngắn để làm rõ lựa chọn. Ví dụ: nói về không khí, cảnh quan tự nhiên hoặc bảo tồn.

例: I prefer views in other countries because many places abroad have cleaner air and well-preserved natural landscapes. For instance, I enjoyed the clear coastal scenery when I visited a seaside town abroad.

× No, I kind, I am a kind person that I like, uh, hardly taking pictures.

✓ No, I'm not; I'm the kind of person who hardly ever takes pictures.

The original sentence has broken structure and incorrect word order. Use 'I'm not' to negate liking taking pictures. 'the kind of person who' is the correct relative clause, and 'hardly ever takes pictures' is the natural adverb placement with third-person singular verb form 'takes'. Suggestion: combine clauses clearly and place adverb 'hardly ever' before the verb; ensure subject-verb agreement.

× If I have a chance I to see a nice view, I will take, uh, a photo of this.

✓ If I have a chance to see a nice view, I will take a photo of it.

The phrase 'I to see' is incorrect; use the infinitive 'to see' after 'have a chance'. 'a photo of this' is unnatural; use 'a photo of it' to refer back to 'a nice view'. Suggestion: use 'have a chance to + verb' and use appropriate pronoun 'it' for the view.

× I think urban areas or rural areas will have own their beautiful views, but if I have a chance to go this place, I will take any photo when I see that it's beautiful.

✓ I think urban and rural areas each have their own beautiful views, but if I have a chance to go to a place, I will take a photo when I see something beautiful.

Problems: 'will have own their' is incorrect order; use 'each have their own'. 'go this place' requires preposition 'to'. 'take any photo' and 'see that it's beautiful' are unnatural; use 'take a photo' and 'see something beautiful'. Suggestion: reorder 'their own', add preposition 'to', and choose natural noun phrases like 'a photo' and 'something beautiful'.

× I think I prefer views in other countries because my country is, uh, polluted pollutions.

✓ I think I prefer views in other countries because my country is polluted.

'polluted pollutions' is incorrect: 'polluted' is an adjective describing the country. 'pollutions' as a plural noun is unnatural here. Use the adjective 'polluted' after the linking verb 'is'. Suggestion: use 'is polluted' or 'has pollution' depending on intended meaning.

× So there are so many buildings and air pollutions.

✓ So there are many buildings and a lot of air pollution.

'So many' can be acceptable but 'air pollutions' is incorrect; 'pollution' is an uncountable noun, so use 'air pollution' or 'a lot of air pollution'. Suggestion: use uncountable noun form for 'pollution' and quantifiers like 'a lot of' or 'much' as appropriate.